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Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
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0 posted 2004-01-21 11:03 AM


The fragile world,
Crumbles to dust,
My body decays,
I slowly rust.

I fall to the abyss,
I drown amidst tears,
In the dark depths,
Crushed by fears.

Left alone,
To rot in hell,
A broken dream
Here I dwell.

My eyes flutter,
The years pass,
Loneliness shatters
My life like glass.

I am broken,
Betrayed and destroyed,
Abandoned and hurt,
Null and void.

I scoop up the pieces,
And at last I stand,
In my broken world,
An unfinished land.

But the seeds of the future,
They swirl and grow,
From here to eternity,
New happiness shall flow…


© Copyright 2004 Jessie Carstein - All Rights Reserved
Terrina
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since 2003-12-31
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1 posted 2004-01-21 11:07 AM


I am glad that even with the heartache you can see the light at the tunnel. Love will never be lost on you!
Excellent poem my dear.

Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
Posts 41

2 posted 2004-01-21 11:08 AM


Thank you very much for reading this, it means a lot to me
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3 posted 2004-01-21 11:22 AM


it was very refreshing to see someone write about such intense "pain" and "loss" and still put a very positive ending on it..

much enjoyed

choshi
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since 2004-01-01
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4 posted 2004-01-21 01:02 PM


jesse, nice to meet you. Such a balance between a fall into the abyss and the value of it for you, great writing  ~C
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5 posted 2004-01-21 01:02 PM


made me cry and smile...nice write
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