Open Poetry #30 |
Chi Mae's Maelstrom |
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I Chi Mae watch for him And wonder if the rain Which fell as pearls against The screen of my window Contained his ashes. Ti Si lay beside me As I spoke to her of the days When I was taken from my home To marry And kissed my tears As I cried for the years I had been away My Mother they told me Died three years after I left But word did not reach me Until the Old Man with Pots Came round and he spoke of my home As he ate the rice I offered. My heart now twists Like the stick caught in spring flood A turn towards Ti Si Then swirled towards thoughts Of him I married. I wait this way On endless days that like camels tied Follow one on the other each stepping in the footprints of the one before and my burden brings fatigue. Ti Si watches me with almond eyes Remaining silent And I pull her closer For this bed is cold And you my husband Do not know the ways of pleasure But for yourself. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've been reading/learning/listening again. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
it all began with a picture... one of bright colors and showing the face of a woman carrying a basket... the rest, simply was born of imagination and the creation of a voice in my head that speaks the words... I am afraid I am still quite ignorant, neglectful of reading, and blind to so much of what I see... lol... why these.. and why the subject matter remains a bit of a mystery to me. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you are a great storyteller...im always looking for more! ...i'll be reading this one again and again! Someday I'll fly, Someday I'll soar, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) a great story teller huh? most people just say I am full of it and know how to spread it around... thank you for the nice words... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And in a wayward backglance, congrats on the milestone. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh you snuck one in on me... Geez, Ron...I wonder where this is going... Then I read the last line...LMAO..guess not... love ya mister! And yes you are a great story teller!!! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) the number of times I might have added some bit of trivial crap to these fine pages is truly not a milestone.. more perhaps something to be mourned... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
HA! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
*smiling at you* whispering ....damn. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan.. thank you Sunshine.. HA! back... Tinker... a sigh from you..is indeed a compliment.. thank you |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
sigh...these are so wonderful to read and get lost in..... ~*~ In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes art |
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poetically ghetto Member
since 2004-01-20
Posts 100 |
even though i'm a man i loved the ending of this poem so good that you keep it real keep up the good work |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
mmmmm I almost forgot the tale of your stories.....eh poetry.....eh..see what I mean.... just kidding I know your poems have mostly always a nice twist....or telling a story...or....more. and you know what, I always like to read you, have missed that lately C. hugs Charisma |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"My heart now twists Like the stick caught in spring flood A turn towards Ti Si Then swirled towards thoughts Of him I married." It is a powerful current to attempt and you write it with the insight and understanding I have come to appreciate so much from you, both as a poet and a friend. |
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