Open Poetry #30 |
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Within Me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla ![]() |
Within Me Within me is a phantoms place A piece of space wrapped up in lace A jewel within times legacy That turns the wheels of fantasy It is an alter egos cog That keeps a timeless spirits log It weaves each day a string of haze That keeps my egos hearth ablaze A mist of finest filament Taken from life’s element Knotted in a weave of cloth That holds a fantasy of broth And from that negative of sum We pull the phantom of a plumb And feed upon its calorie To pay our mind its salary Or else we would forever be Upon a sea of infamy |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
"And from that negative of sum We pull the phantom of a plumb And feed upon its calorie To pay our mind its salary" ---very interesting lines |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Are you saying payback is, well, possibly not. ![]() Good morning, Sy! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Within me is a phantoms place A piece of space wrapped up in lace A jewel within times legacy That turns the wheels of fantasy" Ahhh..within me I have a place I go to at times as well Sy! Nicely said! ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling man this is a froth of sheer delight, and evokes those memories of hazy days in liquid sunshine. Wonderful writing as always, you shine like the star you are Have a great day as always Mushy ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A mist of finest filament Taken from life’s element Knotted in a weave of cloth That holds a fantasy of broth Ah, sheer perfection Seymour! Hugs and Blueberry Muffins ![]() |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
another delight you leave us with Sey. Hugs |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Morning Sy! I don't know how you do it...but you not only do it, you do it very well. ![]() "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Good morning, Semour -- see, those wheels have been well greased this morning! ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Each day you offer from a well-filled poetic coffer Gems of penning in total delight and my friend, they're ALWAYS JUST RIGHT~ ![]() *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
nicely said Sy..... ![]() ~*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And from that negative of sum We pull the phantom of a plumb And feed upon its calorie To pay our mind its salary ============================ I do so love the way your mind-o-cool works me sweet Sy-guy. Youre the plum of me sum. I'm still on a borrowed comp...will write soon...sent you some pics..take care of that cold..we cant have Randy sneezing and torching the place ![]() ![]() *ww* ![]() ![]() ![]() How foolish must man be, not to be impressed by mountains and trees |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Seymour I always enjoy whatever you weave Hope |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
And from that negative of sum We pull the phantom of a plumb And feed upon its calorie To pay our mind its salary they say, what goes around comes around, like a boomerang, I suppose, just and precise, and most knowledgable. Wonderfully written and expressed. |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is not ONE day goes by that I don't read you and learn from you. It absolutely amazes me where you take an ordinary word and I love the trip. ![]() |
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Iron Wolf Junior Member
since 2004-01-20
Posts 23 |
It weaves each day a string of haze That keeps my egos hearth ablaze These two lines really did it for me, I liked the overall finish off the poem as well. |
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