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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-01-19 01:08 PM

Vertigo

once again
I am helplessly
face first
out of control
spiraling to
a place
I can not stop
by surprise
I saw
your face
and my mind
turned too fast
and in a spin
of emotions
knees gave way
I fell
clutching at
nail breaking walls
in echoes of
screaming silence
unable to judge
the distance
powerless to stop
my heart in flip
and I
went down

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2004-01-19 01:29 PM

Here to offer you a hand back up, and a hug to keep you on your feet.

Be well, I pray, lady.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

2 posted 2004-01-19 02:25 PM

1 slick_lady,
   Vertigo doesn't seem like a comfortable place to be; I enjoyed this poem very, very much.  I can relate it to my terrible sense of direction with two teenagers in the car and lost with a blaring radio, rain and darkness.
   Well expressed.  Take care,
              ~Sadelite~

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

3 posted 2004-01-19 03:59 PM

I like the style, you have direction, vision and a sense of where you are going with your words

Yes I liked it

Dave

alan6501
Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 89
PA

4 posted 2004-01-19 05:14 PM

I loved this poem!! Seriously the whole feel and flow captured my current mood perfectly!! I'm copying this and saving it to my computer so I can look at it whenever I get in one of these moods again!!
EXCELLENT READ!!!!