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Rotation de L'âme
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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The Turning of Soul: {and then silence} Exhaling amber and sky The image --how it feels to adore this world you gently haunt Still winter holds my heart pressed to glass, I speak of rain and soaked memories, of this sea & that you may know the moment the center chips of salt desire of thirst colors among earth held in longing sipping nectar with out speech orchids of being enduring darkness Tracing edges of wings blue --a touch of red -- motion of breathing this breathing -- listen we, at heart here palms pressed stars unseen endless shattered ‘peaces’ clearer dreams of water that we may hear falling petals letting music follow he too alone – what might be your words if we could hear them? ~~la rotation de l'âme -- He ce offres~~ midnight arrives softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin ~~ ~*~ In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes art (~~the turning of soul from he that offers~~) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The Turning of Soul: {and then silence} Exhaling amber and sky The image --how it feels to adore this world you gently haunt Still winter holds my heart pressed to glass, I speak of rain and soaked memories, of this sea & that oh Lord dear Lauren....  my dear  sister of heart...you are so precious... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"this breathing -- listen we, at heart here palms pressed stars unseen endless shattered ‘peaces’ clearer dreams of water that we may hear falling petals letting music follow he too alone – what might be your words if we could hear them? ~~la rotation de l'âme -- He ce offres~~ midnight arrives softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin" ============================================= Speechless...I am totally speechless. I don't know of another piece that has had such a profound impact on me. You,...this ..both so beautiful. Love ya lady! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
midnight arrives softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin So softly beautiful, Lauren...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, A lovely, lovely. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I felt I was watching something special Dave |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The term "delicate" has been used, yes? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
the turning of the soul... as always my friend... as always, you move me to shades of green.. envy for the skill, the grace, and the delicacy with which you compose.. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin" What a beautiful ending to another beautifully written poem. And not only that, when reading this poem I am once again reminded of My Arms, Your Hearse, albeit in a softer and gentler style of writing, but nonetheless, brooding, still. Thanks for sharing, Lauren  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
How very elegant this truly was. It suits you. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautifully captivating, dearest friend, I think we all need to absorb a bit of the darkness in so we can reach into ones heart and bring about an eclipse of new comfort and color! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, love the title, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you for taking time to read, I appreciate the comments....hugsssss Lauren~ ~*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I gotta tell ya L~ sometimes I read your words.. and I can feel the ache... luv you...  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"~~la rotation de l'âme -- He ce offres~~ midnight arrives softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin" Whew...that is hot! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Exhaling amber and sky The image --how it feels to adore this world you gently haunt Still winter holds my heart pressed to glass, I speak of rain and soaked memories, of this sea & that --------------- Tracing edges of wings blue --a touch of red -- motion of breathing this breathing -- listen we, at heart here palms pressed stars unseen endless shattered ‘peaces’ clearer dreams of water that we may hear falling petals letting music follow he too alone – what might be your words if we could hear them? ~~la rotation de l'âme -- He ce offres~~ midnight arrives softly still, beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin ~~ ======================== oh girl........ how it feels to adore this world you gently haunt yeesssssss, yes Lord beautiful for his touch his darkness becoming something I want against my skin your poetry haunts beautifully time and time again..and I am always so touched and grateful to get to read them. How foolish must man be, not to be impressed by mountains and trees |
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richard taylor Member
since 2004-01-13
Posts 136 |
very good poem well thought out I enjoyed reading it. take care Richard. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is very touching... ..very gentle.. leaves me *sighing* and *smiling* |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Yes, magnificent!!!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"The image --how it feels to adore this world you gently haunt" The softness of cloud and passion of storm. Amazing...as always.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
whew...you drew me in with "Exhaling amber and sky" (what a great line), though I must admit I had to go to Babelfish for help on the French connection. Nice. |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
endless shattered ‘peaces’-- wise use of the word. liked it! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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