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She Calls Out
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She Calls Out |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
From a vast distance, the dusk sun sinks in darkness. She calls out, words fading- She seems so far away, almost a distant shadow that casts light on my heart's surfaces. What can no longer be spoken, known in the heart's depths, where all becomes merged in unity and where words fail to convey the heart's true strength. Some things are never know, yet felt sharply as winter's bone-chilling wind. Other things never spoken, yet known as the burning candle flame flickers, melting down on a moonless night; casting reflections of love's dance stretched across lace curtains, bare walls, and memories where petals are strewn and rose scents waft in the violet air. The call of the eagle flying overhead utters what words can never say. Lovers listen in cliff-edged awe and return to the silence of the night breeze. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"The call of the eagle flying overhead utters what words can never say. Lovers listen in cliff-edged awe and return to the silence of the night breeze. " Wonderful image! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
A mental call edged on a wavelength only a lover can receive. Deep imagery, nice writing, nice thoughts with a hint of panic. Dave |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Icebox & Dave: Thank you. ~C |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... your words make quite an impact! *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Some things are never know, yet felt sharply as winter's bone-chilling wind. Other things never spoken, yet known as the burning candle flame flickers, melting down on a moonless night;" Also the last stanza, left me awestruck! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
almost a distant shadow that casts light on my heart's surfaces. beautiful |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
your words make quite an impact! *S* Thank you Suthern, may the impact be beneficial...~C |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Also the last stanza, left me awestruck! Thank you Iliana.....your kindness has me smiking |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
"beautiful" Thank you, Dixie, and beautiful work at your website, thank you for sharing ~C [This message has been edited by choshi (01-19-2004 07:47 AM).] |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
Look at Choshi...getting all lengthy on us!  Your words set the stage of relaxation and depth in the quiet. I enjoyed reading your creation. As does concise statements, this wordy display suits you well! Thanks for sharing this one. McLean |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
YES!! choshi goes the distance!!! exquisite as always looking forward to more The call of the eagle flying overhead utters what words can never say. what DO these guys know more or are they blessed without this innane vocabulary that never quite speaks what just is i felt a shudder as the eagle flew i felt just then that you knew no need for words feel my spirit enter you |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i feel a chilly loneliness from this one. though it hurts its also a bit comforting...a chapter i think we have all had in our lives. really enjoyed this. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Look at Choshi...getting all lengthy on us! Your words set the stage of relaxation and depth in the quiet. Thank you McLean, your comments are most appreciated, I am glad you felt the experience of relaxation and depth...~C |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
what DO these guys know more or are they blessed without this innane vocabulary that never quite speaks what just is Good question, Inkedgoddess. What is your take on it? i felt a shudder as the eagle flew i felt just then that you knew no need for words feel my spirit enter you ~~~~~~<@>~~~~~~ the eagle soars, ~C |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Muted writes: i feel a chilly loneliness from this one. though it hurts its also a bit comforting...a chapter i think we have all had in our lives. really enjoyed this. Nice to meet you Muted, thank you for sharing...Yes, you read me well...~C |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Enjoyed...James Glad....~C |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- what DO these guys know more or are they blessed without this innane vocabulary that never quite speaks what just is Good question, Inkedgoddess. What is your take on it? i dont know, some ways they are blessed without havng to suffer the daily grind of life as they just are........ but life isnt easy for them either i guess, they must grieve too when one of their own leaves the earth, dont u think |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Imkedgoddess wrote: "...but life isnt easy for them either i guess, they must grieve too when one of their own leaves the earth, dont u think?" this meadow where they flock; the wild geese- cry plaintively in the dusk and stain the grass blades with tears. ~C |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
YES! very enjoyed this wonderful write. |
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