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iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

0 posted 2004-01-16 04:38 PM

Take those chocolate drop eyes out of mine,
You're fattening.
I don't have the time for your fantasies.

You make it difficult for me to see beyond
the high cholesterol levels.
You put on too much extra weight.

I'm going on a diet tomorrow.
I'm tired of feeling heavy with all your indecision.
I'm giving up romance and all the extra calories
that lay stagnant near my heart.

I'm going to start by avoiding sweets
like those hot fudge looks you give.
I'm going to learn to look beyond,

and, hopefully, learn to live.

Iliana

[This message has been edited by iliana (01-17-2004 09:17 PM).]

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2004-01-16 05:36 PM

ILIANA DEAR
giving up sweets is impossible!!!!
your craving monster will build to the point of forcing you to knock over a troup of Girl Scouts for their goods!
Treat yourself to a weekly fudge fling,,,,or a dip -o-chocolate,,,,,
women NEED chocolate! It keeps us sane!
Besides,,,,be happy wit who you ARE, once you get to lovin you,,,you can do anything....
I'm a big girl,,,,,and 6 feet tall to boot, lol, so, dainty I'd never see,,,,
But, I am a big beautiful woman,,,,,and my true love reminds me of that everyday,,,,not always with words,,,,,but with touch and deed as well....
Anyway! I've rambled on enough,,,hang tough,,no matter which way you go!
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

McLean
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

2 posted 2004-01-16 05:51 PM

I love chocolate, but I love my sweet the best! This is fun to read, oh the similarities!

McLean

jaicie114
Senior Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 750
On the edge of forever

3 posted 2004-01-16 06:05 PM

Nice imagery, iliana...thank you!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-01-16 06:24 PM

Michelle -- LOL. I appreciate your words and agree with them totally. The poem really was not about a real diet -- when I wrote it a long time ago, it was about a gorgeous man with the most beautiful brown eyes you'd ever want to see which saw right into my soul. He, however, never had the courage to move on what I knew were his feelings -- it really made me angry which is how the poem arrived! Thanks for posting. Take care.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-01-16 06:26 PM

McLean -- clever response to the poem (written moons ago -- unrequited love). Thanks for reading. Smiles!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-01-16 06:26 PM

Jaicie114 -- Glad you liked it. Thank you very much for your sweetness!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2004-01-17 08:04 PM

(smiles) There's nothing wrong with a nice sweet every now and then, but while I can't resist chocolate, hehehe,

, I also love health food and to smell all the herbs and oregano and bergamot is just what the doctor ordered! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, taste life as you want it to taste, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jo, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2004-01-17 08:08 PM

iliana...sometimes the craving for love is like chocolate...I understand and loved this clever metaphor.

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

9 posted 2004-01-17 08:16 PM

iliana, I just love poems that are metaphors and this one is truly outstanding. Nice job!

huggles, Marti

I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel
more like I transcribe them. It's just a matter of listening.

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

10 posted 2004-01-17 08:33 PM

Really good words with a lovely twist on the map inside the box seeking molten pleasure and melting passion.

only comments I would make

Lick the honey stranger and ask no questions

Melt in the mouth and not the hand

Dave

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

11 posted 2004-01-17 08:52 PM

iliana,
Cute. Big brown eyes. Hm. I wonder who... Very involving write-couldn't help but chuckle at your clever metaphors.
Sadelite

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