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Still Life In Window's Pain |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She sits Out of my sight Among the frozen winter’s leave Pondering the hurts of him Perhaps of me And feels the winds Too cold for the coat of arms She doesn’t have wrapped around The person she truly is I wonder If the eyes would gaze on me With regret or sorrow Worst, with pity For all I never am Yet I picture her Against the weak and faded sun An outline With taut lips that slide Into gentle curve of skin No longer bared for him Too tender still For me [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (01-16-2004 05:04 PM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I wonder If the eyes would gaze on me With regret or sorrow Worst, with pity For all I never am Oh, I beg to differ. With words as soft and from deep within your heart as these, how could she not but fall in love with you? Going into my library this is! hugs, Chris "When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You know |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"And feels the winds Too cold for the coat of arms She doesn’t have wrapped around The person she truly is I wonder If the eyes would gaze on me With regret or sorrow Worst, with pity For all I never am" You do what you do...so well.  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
this is amazing....OMG what words.... ~*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I wonder If the eyes would gaze on me With regret or sorrow Worst, with pity For all I never am I felt this, and feel it so often and wish no one ever had to feel this way.... omg.....any one would have to be a fool not to want these words wrapped around them...a sigh waiting to happen... very well done and captivating sir...  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
library ~*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write as always...Captain sir. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Extraordinary write! A keeper! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yet I picture her Against the weak and faded sun An outline With taut lips that slide Into gentle curve of skin No longer bared for him Too tender still For me Incredible portrait of that turning in that's so necessary before one can again look outwards. *S* I like this very much! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Mr. Metaphor has done it again. It would be an even more stark world without the images you verbally paint. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Haven't read all of the responses... no need to. They are all saying... in one way or another... you are poet. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Missed this stuff man... This was honesty in barest form...I love it!! take care sweets ~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
i can feel the tender longing, she is desired, yet not selfishly. beautiful work! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This one I keep. I'm tempted to say why, but...won't. Too personal....I'll just say and this poem could have been written from inside me, and I wish it had been. Thank you for every word. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have to keep this one too |
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Singularity Junior Member
since 2004-01-16
Posts 10Sunny California |
Strong words. Sounds like somethin' I went through myself not too long ago. If I had a library, this would go in it ;-) |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Of unsurpassed quality, Ron. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...You are such a sensitive man to see this and write it as you did...you touched me. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ron, I'm adding this lovingly tender poem to my library, too. It really touched my heart.  Ethel |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I alwayz enjoy your writing. A tender write indeed!!!! HUGS, Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wow, oooooops did I said that.....but then its such a beautiful write...loved it Charisma |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
just had to revisit these words for the mood and emotion....thank you for this....   ~~**~~ |
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