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Hold On
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Leah Caldwell New Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 4 |
You told me if i 'Hold On' then things will be alright You told me i could make it Make it through tonight You think you see the things that cause me tears I listened to the song, it was a portrait of my fears I listened and the words came alive in my heart Every word they sang filled my eyes from the start I put it on replay and the tears kept on falling I sat on that chair until early hours of the morning My tears didnt dry up, endless and flowing Why do just those words seem like they're knowing Knowing the thoughts that are consuming my head Knowing that sometimes i just wish i could stay in bed I cant imagine why you sent me the song It said in its lyrics 'I know you are strong' If you can see one ounce of strength within me I'd be quite suprised cause i cant set it free This lonliness has engulfed all of my power This worthlessness goes on hour after hour And as much as i want to believe that its true As much as im trying Im trying for you Im only 16 My spelling cant get any better lol! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
My tears didnt dry up, endless and flowing Why do just those words seem like they're knowing Knowing the thoughts that are consuming my head Knowing that sometimes i just wish i could stay in bed Hi Leah,  This is a really good poem. I'm sure that many can relate to it. thanks for sharing it with us. and welcome again.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
That's okay Leah my typing is really bad. You are on the start of a great gift. Your poems are enticing and great to read. Thanks again for another great contribution. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautiful and sad... And just for the record...you are strong. Love you girl! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
wonderful write...and sometimes spelling isn't everything. I look forward to reading more of your work! This was really great! Take care, Amy  "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hi Leah! I'll bet you're a lot stronger than you think! Great write here. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... and glad to see you came back to offer us another poem.. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Leah -- this could make a song! Hang in there, girl! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
The strngth shines through in this. Good one! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Leah...You are holding on with words...they can be quite a life raft! Wonderfully done... I have felt this way. Hugs! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Life can really be the needle in the thumb. -JUJU- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....psst....just so you know...the finest poet in this group is also the worst speller...won't say who, because they've already replied to this poem and I wouldn't want to embarrass them(!).....it's what you do with words, the tones and shades and shapes and meanings, that counts. Spelling is important but it comes so far behind those other things that it's hard to see one from the other. You're already very good where it counts, and if you can do this well at 16, one of these days you are going to be superb. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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