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Open Poetry #30

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symphony_of_thoughts
Member

since 2003-08-03

Posts 95
Somewhere

0 posted 2004-01-14 04:32 PM

I walk through the madness,
As I proclaim it is.
I may hold the better,
Upon the comparison,
Of two,
But I still stand,
In madness I say.
I run at times,
And tear the god-forsaken
Wreckage to shreds,
Of anger induced dillusion.
And can't quite makeout,
Myself at times,
Because I tore myself
Up outside and inside too,
To pieces and lost,
Previous concepts.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2004-01-14 04:38 PM

Very well done, I sensed the inner conflict. If I'm wrong about that, then I need to get my senses checked.

I really dug this but, I think you may have typoed in the last line.
Correct me if I'm wrong in correcting you. It makes me feel rude.

symphony_of_thoughts
Member

since 2003-08-03

Posts 95
Somewhere

2 posted 2004-01-14 04:44 PM

Thanks for the comments. Yeah, I noticed the typo in the last line. No problem.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2004-01-14 09:23 PM

A tempest brewed before my eyes, and you steer it in masterful precision.
Very well done.
ThisDiamond

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