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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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0 posted 2004-01-14 10:33 AM


When I look at me I see
a light inside of me
I see a past,a present, and future
happiness as far as I can see

I see strength,
and weakness.
I see humble and brokeness.

I see an innocent young child
inspiring to be just.
An aspiring friend
shining brightly among the stars,
dimmed only by a tad of disappointment.

I see today a heart full time
a friend to all, even in pain
love taken to the fullest
innosense stripped away
like dirty laundry not yet washed

I see a child's image left at the brink of my eyes.
Young, an adult but not quiete OLD.
when I look at me I see
a very bright future ahead of me.
awake in the shadows,
pain will not dwindle.

                   Love,
             xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
Graduation : January 29th 2004

[This message has been edited by Kellie_Cantrell (01-15-2004 10:29 AM).]

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2004-01-14 04:40 PM


In the play of light and shadows ... you see the brightness of the future and this is very important .... and pain WILL dwindle!

Good job!
Love, Margherita

Michelle_loves_Mike
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2 posted 2004-01-15 07:50 AM


You can see within yourself, the power to rule the world,,,,,simply because,,,you can see inside yourself,,,,
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
3 posted 2004-01-15 08:33 AM


kellie-

this is such an honest and open
write, and one with which many can
identify! you have shown the strength
to look within yourself, and really
see yourself--brilliant writing!

take care,
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

rainydaymusic
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since 2004-01-14
Posts 26

4 posted 2004-01-15 08:38 AM


they say that self knowledge is wisdom.  I related to much of this poem, because I have expressed similar sentiment in my own work.  The only thing is the use of the word "sad" - we all describe ourselves in that way, don't we?  It's overused in poetry, I think, and it's such a simple word anyway.


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