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When I look at me (REWRITE)
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When I look at me (REWRITE) |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York 
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When I look at me I see a light inside of me I see a past,a present, and future happiness as far as I can see I see strength, and weakness. I see humble and brokeness. I see an innocent young child inspiring to be just. An aspiring friend shining brightly among the stars, dimmed only by a tad of disappointment. I see today a heart full time a friend to all, even in pain love taken to the fullest innosense stripped away like dirty laundry not yet washed I see a child's image left at the brink of my eyes. Young, an adult but not quiete OLD. when I look at me I see a very bright future ahead of me. awake in the shadows, pain will not dwindle. Love, xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx Graduation : January 29th 2004 [This message has been edited by Kellie_Cantrell (01-15-2004 10:29 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
In the play of light and shadows ... you see the brightness of the future and this is very important .... and pain WILL dwindle! Good job! Love, Margherita  |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
You can see within yourself, the power to rule the world,,,,,simply because,,,you can see inside yourself,,,, Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kellie- this is such an honest and open write, and one with which many can identify! you have shown the strength to look within yourself, and really see yourself--brilliant writing! take care, amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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rainydaymusic Junior Member
since 2004-01-14
Posts 26 |
they say that self knowledge is wisdom. I related to much of this poem, because I have expressed similar sentiment in my own work. The only thing is the use of the word "sad" - we all describe ourselves in that way, don't we? It's overused in poetry, I think, and it's such a simple word anyway. |
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