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MARK V SHELDON
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0 posted 2004-01-13 06:56 PM

TWENTY OR LESS...#178

Copyright 2004 by:MARK V SHELDON

tepid

until one mystical morning
changed

by a shiver

wrapped in the purple scarf
of your soft laugh

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iliana
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1 posted 2004-01-13 07:12 PM

Mark, this was beautiful!

MARK V SHELDON
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2 posted 2004-01-13 07:16 PM

Humble thanks, iliana.

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Midnitesun

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3 posted 2004-01-13 08:42 PM

Mark, this is one of my favorites of yours. Exquisite, beauty simple as a single flower bud.

Kit McCallum

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4 posted 2004-01-13 09:15 PM

Mark, how beautiful this is ... I loved the phrasing and sentiment.

Best wishes,
/Kit

MARK V SHELDON
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5 posted 2004-01-13 10:15 PM

Thanks, Kacy... A flowerbud... I never thought of it that way, but it definitely works.

Hey there, Kit! Thank you for the kind words and the read.

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Cpat Hair

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6 posted 2004-01-14 08:46 AM

"wrapped in the purple scarf
of your soft laugh"

now these two lines indeed struck me...
one is lured into the image of a laugh and comfort from the chill..and visualizes something soft or at least warm even if a bit scratchy.. very nice Mark.. very nice indeed.. enough, but not too much, with still room for the meanings and layers to be formed by the reader..

as usual.. I'm impressed..

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-01-14 09:02 AM

Mark..you do these SO well...
I especially love the images in this one.
Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2004-01-14 09:09 AM

MARK,
Now that is bait for any fish.

MARK V SHELDON
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9 posted 2004-01-14 11:48 AM

Thank you, Ron. After all this time, they're still fun to write, and I always look forward to the impressions they leave with the readers. Thanks for the uplift.

Nancy, I guess there's some truth to the practice bit afterall... Thank you for the

Sy: Lure them in and set them free...

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passing shadows
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10 posted 2004-01-14 12:51 PM

in awe...

MARK V SHELDON
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11 posted 2004-01-14 02:22 PM

Dixie:

-MVS

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