Open Poetry #30 |
I still miss..... |
Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
There's no way to redeem myself, no way to convince you of my worth, if I felt I had any at all. The leaves are leaving me.. They've skipped the Autumn color change, and forgotten that I loved to watch the orange cry among the floor of dirt. I beg I plead I fall on my knees and ask what was it in life that I'd done wrong? What could it have been, what sin did I commit to lose all that I love and still keep.. With fear.. I can't hold down the feeling like my spine is turning to liquid ..there's nothing I could say to change what you feel is the inevitable, no tears could change the fact that I am simply not good enough. My love could not hold you like I'd once thought it did.. And here I lie, heartbroken in enraged silence.. The leaves are leaving me.. And I miss you still. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
meg, my darlin...you do not write with ink...your pen spills blood and tears...and you touch me so...h |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My dear lady... to say you were not good enough..can not be truthful. If you gave of yourself in measures that spoke to truly putting someone else before yourself.. you did all you could..and it was not a measure of your worth, but of the lack ability of the other to accept it. as always you write well.. and the missing.. ah now that I understand.. you are more than good enough... don't forget you have worth and value..and that you sometimes just run across people who get scared by it... or are not in a place they can accept it.. hugs... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"My love could not hold you like I'd once thought it did.. And here I lie, heartbroken in enraged silence.. The leaves are leaving me.. And I miss you still." My gawd this just aches! Fantastic out pouring of feelings here. Extremely well penned. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. I found there lives within me, an invincible summer. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kaoru, nice writing, very expressive; it touched me to the point I want to say what I say to my daughter: if he doesn't love you, then he IS NOT THE RIGHT ONE and that one will come along! Love always returns; usually when we least expect it! |
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ambrya_nell Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 28Ohio |
All I can say is HIS LOSS.... His missing out on a very creative, passionate person... I absolutely love your work... It touches me..... It's hard to evoke such strong emotion with simple typed words on a screen.. but you do it well. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
There's no way to redeem myself, no way to convince you of my worth, if I felt I had any at all. How can you say that... just look at yourself, and that beautiful face of yours. Then, you have that extreme talent that is overwhelming! Great write, it is...but I think it's greater then what you think. Sincerely, Sauni. Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Serra_Avatar Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 58 |
Never stop smiling... because you never know who's falling in love with it. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
heartfelt... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
..there's nothing I could say to change what you feel is the inevitable, no tears could change the fact that I am simply not good enough. darn Meg, I've said this to myself so very often, and still do...and still don't have the answers..and wish that no one ever would have to feel this way...but I know this well.....may you feel peace soon hon...hugs.... It's better than I could have planned.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A very old fashioned feel to this writing, Meghan. Towards the very end I felt as if I had been thrown back about five or six decades. So, when are you going to start compiling all of these gems for your book, m'dear? |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
You're amazing. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
What could it have been, what sin did I commit to lose all that I love and still keep.. With fear.. I can't hold down the feeling like my spine is turning to liquid Meghan, this is such a heartbreaking write. It really touched me. Great big hugs to you, sweetie Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
There's no way to redeem myself, no way to convince you of my worth, if I felt I had any at all. Shame on you...shame..shame shame...if the ol boy had any sense at all, he'd have seen you were priceless and worth every ounce in gold. And never ever think otherwise...your a golden array of voice smiling on this place our earth. Hugs, wonderful write! |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
I can't hold down the feeling like my spine is turning to liquid I especially like the way this sounds. Cool. Your writing is very sad and lonely in tone. I hope that you are not feeling so blue, and if you are, I do wish you comfort. You express emotions very well in here! McLean |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo Allysa M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
The leaves are leaving me.. They've skipped the Autumn color change, and forgotten that I loved to watch the orange cry among the floor of dirt. Yes but the colors will again fold and become new again. It is not an easy trek and I know your journey well. It is difficult but tomorrow will come and your heart will again be new. You write from the soul and your heart, your poetry is touching and inspiring. |
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