The King Is In His Counting House....

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ice
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since 2003-05-17

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Pennsylvania

0 posted 2004-01-12 06:38 AM

Wave's, the frost tanned flags
That forms a tasseled dress:
Pointed leaf-tips, waving south,
The wind from northward strays;
This cold November day....
*
By some chance a corn seed fell here
Far outside appointed furrow,
Center field, inside a castle ruins;
Built with stones that cleared the plowman's way.
*
Out of reach of reaper jaws,
When the green deer slashed your kin
To fragrant-fodder, at the start of fall,
And ground up any future promise
Of corn-grain sons, and daughters...
Their germ and yellow coats
Now sweet fermenting, high
In concrete, silo towers.
*
Chance allowed your stalk to stand, here out of reach
But nature hates a waste, and taxes every niche
And so it makes, cobs as precious as is gold:
Beneath the castle rocks, piled high
Within his counting house, counting yellow stones;
The king..... a tiny field-mouse, grins.

Terrina
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since 2003-12-31

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California

1 posted 2004-01-12 11:40 AM

Wonderful read

passing shadows
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displaced

2 posted 2004-01-12 12:27 PM

how vivid

enjoyed this

ice
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since 2003-05-17

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Pennsylvania

3 posted 2004-01-12 08:27 PM

Thank you, Terrina and Passing Shadows, for reading and commenting....:-)
_______ice
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iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

4 posted 2004-01-12 11:45 PM

Ice, I love your work!

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

5 posted 2004-01-13 12:43 PM

A wonderful read before heading off for work.
Thank-you for sharing it.

:-) See you Saturday night in chat

Ribbits

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2004-01-13 01:42 PM

very nicely done...
the telling and the imagery smooth and seamless....

very impressive.. indeed!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2004-01-13 02:09 PM

ice
You made the full circle and I melted on the way. Well done.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-01-13 02:11 PM

Very much enjoyed the read today.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-01-13 02:25 PM

The largess of nature
is never to be confused
with the greed of a mouse.

Smiling at you...for very clever
is your mind.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2004-01-17 08:12 PM

(giggles in delight) Awwwwwwww, it's nothing but a cute field mouse, here mousey mousey mousey! (lets it crawl into Mistletoe Angel's and and pets it gently with left hand) Yay! (giggles) This is adorable, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

11 posted 2004-01-17 08:46 PM

ice...This poem is very special. It reminded me of a sunflower that grew from the crease in our brokendown hot tub and made me smile. This poem made me smile too. Thank you for that.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

12 posted 2004-01-18 12:44 PM

what a great use of decription and vivid imagery. wonderful read...excellent!

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