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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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One Effect My skin has lost its fat soft bed And when it’s bruised stays angry red It takes two weeks to disappear And stays beyond its welcomes wear It is a thing of hapless age It is a symbol of a stage A reading of the gauge of prime The writing of old father time That along with other coups The least of which distorts the view I needn’t paint a picture dreary That would make the scene too weary And I in truth can only say A cast of symbols weighs my day And I in honesty confess The weight of aging is a mess Forgive this anti bittersweet This box of candy is deplete |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling. My mother-in-law is 95. I hear her constantly say, "don't get this old." I ask her what is my alternative? And we both enjoy a laugh. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
lol sunday morning comes with a smile is there an age that we can finally enjoy the candy without guilt? i dont know, i wonder |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Sy, age is only a number. And I wish you a long, happy and healthy life because I like your style. believe in what your heart feels... |
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McLean Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 484state of marital bliss |
I thought of aging hands, when I read "lost it's fat soft bed". There are days, although I have a fat soft bed covering most of me, that I feel ancient, at 34. I tend to be a different age at different hours of the day. Good write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine I like your smile.  inkedgoddess It's an abstract of the mind. LOL scorpio THe style is good for a while. LOL McLean This age we cannot reverse. LOL |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I'm glad the bruises do go away, but thankful your words are ageless. I enjoy your poems very much. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you know, this is so true...we repeat history...sometimes hopefully in an even better way...Sy, this was a wonderful write...your so humble and kind...thank you for sharing and caring |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inot2B A kind wish thank you. LeeJ Good morning sweet and thank you.  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey, Sy - Perfect description. If I smooch ya on your cheek again, will it stay there for awhile? I'm headed to your part of the country at the end of this month. I hope to meet up with you two and Mike again. Drop me a line. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Seymour, is it cold in your part of Florida? the cold seems to make a body feel older, doesn't it? LOL This made me think of my "Age Is Just A Number" poem. I think I'll go get it and repost. LOL Hugs  Ethel |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
excellent write, Sy! This reminds me of my grandpa's aging spots. Although they were on his hands, they didn't slow him down. His mind was frisky! He had a young mind like someone else I know at Passions... ~Sadelite~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
You never cease to amaze me, Sir. I would gladly drink from the river of your muse... to be able to write a new beauty every single day... Wow! Good to read you again, Sy. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LngJhnAg, It would be nice to see you again, its been a while. Did you Email Mike? Ethel Be nice to read and thank you for this read. Sadelite LOL It's not all in the mind some things just happen. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This aging thing, I must confess does bring to me some sure duress for bruises I do get as well and seems forever they all dwell. New spots and places I've never seen my eyes with glasses newly glean A spot now here that once was not Oh my, what has this aging wrought? I creak and crack in my old back I slowly rise now from my sack some exercise I surely lack and bruises come red, blue and black. I know of what you do express I surely feel this is a mess But He has given me great joy of being a child, man and boy. Thanx Sy, I know of what you speak, so very well.... |
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Nahgied New Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 9 |
That along with other coups The least of which distorts the view I needn’t paint a picture dreary That would make the scene too weary ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ i really felt this...i have not read much of your work- for i am new to the forums- but y the looks of this and a few other pieces, you are quite the writer. keep them coming...alex |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy "And I in honesty confess The weight of aging is a mess" I've felt this a time or two. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MARK, Missed you my friend, it's good to have you near again. Magus, You have come a long way and one of my favorites, thank you Barry Alex, Thank you for the read and kind reply. Martie You are a love. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Seymour -- great poem. The body may age but the mind and soul sure are right with it! hugs, jo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you iliana, you are a dear. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My skin has lost its fat soft bed Oh, that I could say the same... but my padding is aging right along with me! *G* Sweet is never deplete when you're around, my friend... Excellent work! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Thank you love. |
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