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GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

0 posted 2004-01-10 05:36 AM

I won’t admit to hurting,
Though I’ll admit to pain,
There deep within my flesh
I find it beating with the rain.

Sometimes, still, I miss you
And sometimes I still sigh,
It travels to my heart
And begins beating ‘til I cry.

Your words are always torture
Since they always echo you,
They find a place within me
And they beat me through and through.

I won’t admit to hurting,
Though I’ll admit to pain.
This beating that I feel
Makes missing you in vain.

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

1 posted 2004-01-10 07:43 AM

A very sincere message from the heart, very well written, hope all goes well.

Sincerely
Rick

harash
Member

since 2003-12-27

Posts 99
India

2 posted 2004-01-10 09:48 AM

feelings are worded in fine way...a lovely write..

Harash

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

3 posted 2004-01-10 10:52 AM

sad but beautiful.
I like this

:-)

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2004-01-10 11:18 AM

Alyssa,

McLean
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

5 posted 2004-01-10 12:00 PM

This is so rythmic, just like the beating, eh? A tough thing expressed greatly through your words.

McLean

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2004-01-10 12:17 PM

GG
Well done a good write.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-01-10 02:35 PM

very clever

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2004-01-11 12:09 PM

GG, I hear the beat -- great poem! .....jo

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

9 posted 2004-01-11 03:07 AM

I love how you wrote this. And it hits home for me. ~K~

ambrya_nell
Junior Member

since 2004-01-11

Posts 28
Ohio

10 posted 2004-01-11 03:22 AM

This is very good.. I love the rhythm... short and sweet.
Good work

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

11 posted 2004-01-11 02:35 PM

Rick,
do things ever go well lol? But, maybe things will change. Thank you for your kind reply

harash,
good good glad you think so

It was just one of those five minute, get it onto paper deals... Thanks for replying.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

12 posted 2004-01-11 02:38 PM

froggy,
that's what a hopeless romantic is, sad but beautiful. Too bad it never gets anyone anywhere lol. Thank you much

Ethel,

thank you.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

13 posted 2004-01-11 02:41 PM

McLean,
you know I honestly hadn't thought of that lol ..maybe it was a subliminal thought upon writing. Thanks for your reply

Sey,
thanks kind sir. Always good to hear from ya.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

14 posted 2004-01-11 02:47 PM

Dix,
like I said lol honestly hadn't thought of it... Thanks for your reply

Kahlil,
if this has hit home for you then there was reason enough to write it

thank you.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

15 posted 2004-01-11 02:50 PM

whoops,
don't know how I skipped you there iliana!
Thank you much for your reply!

ambrya,
welcome here!!! And thank you, glad you like it

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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