Tear Drops In The Sand ( An Attempt at writing a Song)

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Paul Wilson

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0 posted 2004-01-09 01:16 PM

My first ever attempt at trying to write a song

Tear Drops In The Sand
By Paul Wilson

Sleeping for minutes when I can
I close my eyes and dream of yesterday's
Time spent with children lovers and friends
now alone in another land

Teardrops fall softly from my eyes
Each one a memory
A memory
Of loved ones and sad goodbye's

Counting the days till I can smile
Smoke filled skies cover the morning sun
Yesterday's losses a sad memory now
One left behind a wife and child

Give me just one more day
…One more day…
Take me back sweet Jesus
to better times and better days I pray

Teardrops fall softly from my eyes
Each one a memory
A memory
Of loved ones and sad goodbye's

The days are so hot and nights are so cold
Fighting's all around us
Against an enemy no one knows
Lord Jesus…please watch over my soul

Give me just one more day
…One more day…
Take me back sweet Jesus
to better times and better days I pray

Teardrops in the sand
Disappear never to be found
Tear drops of loneliness
Shed by a soldier in a foreign land

Watch over me and mine
Keep us safe and sound
Just one more day sweet Jesus
And I’ll leave this war behind

[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (01-10-2004 09:31 AM).]

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

1 posted 2004-01-09 01:18 PM

Beautiful Paul...I have been missing your words.
Would love to hear this put to music.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
an invincible summer.

Nightshade

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2 posted 2004-01-09 01:24 PM

Watch over me and mine
Keep us safe and sound
Just one more day sweet Jesus
And I’ll leave this war behind

Amen. Well done Paul. hugs, Chris

Paul Wilson

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3 posted 2004-01-09 02:00 PM

Nancy...Thanks so much. I miss this wonderful place and my family of poets as well. If you know any good singers maybe we could get them to work on this, for all our soldiers and their families.Thanks for the sweet reply...Paul

Chris...Thank you dear friend for the read and reply...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2004-01-09 07:37 PM

Enjoyed your song very much Paul.
Good to read you again. TD

Paul Wilson

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5 posted 2004-01-10 09:26 AM

ThisDiamond...Thanks so much for taking time to read & reply. Glad you enjoyed it...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Mistletoe Angel

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6 posted 2004-01-10 06:21 PM

(big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, I too cry for our ailing, sad little world and all of God's children who have to be plagued with the sights and sounds of hatred and violence and war and pray that finally mankind can be governed with love and we have to fear nothing but God! (sad sigh) I too write songs and I sing and would love to cover this in the future, yay, this ought to be a huge Billboard hit, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Margherita
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7 posted 2004-01-10 07:08 PM

Paul, this is a very beautiful song, it tears the heart apart. Touching write. It seemed as if you were actually living this tragedy yourself.
Love, Margherita

Bill Charles
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8 posted 2004-01-10 07:22 PM

Paul - very well done for the first attempt. The words are very moving and say a lot...

BC

Paul Wilson

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9 posted 2004-01-10 08:39 PM

Noah... Thank you sweet friend for all of your kind words. This just came to me yesterday. I thought it would be a tribute to our service men & women who are defending all that we live for, our freedom.I know it lacks alot and could be fine tuned, but the main idea is there.
I really would love to hear it put to music in the style of Alan Jackson, his music and words is so down to earth and touching.

Margherita...Thank you so much for your kind words. That's just the way I write, I always try to put myself in the place that I am writing about.Glad you enjoyed it...Paul

Bill...So glad to hear from you my friend.
Thanks very much for taking time to read & reply.
I was looking at your weather cam today. The snow up there looks so beautiful, but the tempatures I could do without it said -3 how do you survive it?
I said this was my first try at writing a song because the one from last year that you worked on so much for me was just an after thought. About a week ago I decided I would actually try and write a real song. I would really appreciate any pointers you could give me on writing it better, you know like Chorus and Bridge I don't know what any of that stuff is.
Bill drop me an e mail if you feel like helping a beginner. Thanks again...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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