Open Poetry #30 |
Broken |
Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
Gave you my heart to keep, Went for it took the leap. Broken... Beaten down I did submit, To you my life I commit. Broken... Miss you when you're away, Wish you could just stay. Broken... Hollow and alone with you not around, Your voice is no more than a distant sound. Broken... All the things that go through my head, I know what needs to be said. Broken... I'm broken... Can you hear my cries, can you hear my pleads, will you watch me burn...or would you bleed for me? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gawd this just aches Kyle! Heart hugs. In the midst of winter.. |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
the end-stops sound very forced just for the sake of matching up... |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
It needs to be sung accompanied only by an acoustic guitar. I think the rhythm of it longs to be the beginning lyrics of a song I like it. Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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