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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-01-08 04:25 PM

Late Afternoon

                        I don’t know whether
                           the doorbell works; it did,
                             last time I checked             Pictures smile on the walls,
                                                                     one a little tilted but not
                                                                        enough to straighten
        There’s music if we wanted it
                                                               Pilot light’s on
                                                               for the season
       You’re reading a book,
      I don’t know which                  The dryer is running
                                                  you can scent hot wet cloth
              Talk radio rambles,
              intent on itself                    Sunset color starting to reflect
                                                             through the window
        If I brought in wood,
           lit the fireplace,                Outside the hedge still looks ok
              it might be nice
                                   you can hear an
                                 occasional airplane
                                if you’re paying attention

                 you haven’t said my name in four days

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-01-08 04:47 PM

...and you don't bring me roses,
anymore...

~*~

Enjoyed this very much, James.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2004-01-08 05:41 PM

Jamie

Another day in the life...and suddenly one thing has become so important...can see the need for just one simple word. Very poignant!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2004-01-08 05:43 PM

this one got to me a bit...

maybe to close to home...

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2004-01-08 05:46 PM

Oh my. This is powerful. You never say what you mean, but suddenly it's there-undeniable and urgent. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

wickedbeautifulpoetry
Member

since 2004-01-03

Posts 84
Indiana, USA

5 posted 2004-01-08 05:54 PM

brilliant poem...
simply beautiful.

-katie-

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

6 posted 2004-01-08 07:23 PM

Maybe you need to whisper her name once in a while?
Great poem....glad the hedge is ok.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2004-01-08 07:48 PM

Jamie~
Did I like everything about this ???
Indeed I did~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2004-01-08 07:52 PM

James - a name not said for four days, touching it is...

BC

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2004-01-09 05:28 PM

What a beautiful picture of ordinary... with the one thing you never want to become ordinary a stab of pain within the mundane.

I like this so much, Jamie... I've read it several times... will read it many more. *S*

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