Open Poetry #30 |
a pebble and its egg, a cautionary tale... |
disc22 New Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 8lancs, england |
this is not the type of stone that remains inside my pocket; for reasons undeveloped. you could bring it to me, and I would place it in this Stream, leaving it to float among the Sidling or be rested at the floor. almost forever, until a Fresh current revives it, pushing on its back legs, pulling it to the Surface. when it breathes, it Gulps at air. when it sleeps, it tends to Snore. and a Clouded day will bring rain, scattering leaves and pebbles. Call out to the bird that has taken its leaf to its nest to nourish its wings. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I like this much disc...very much indeed ~wranx |
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disc22 New Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 8lancs, england |
cheers... why? sorry, i've hardly written before, so i need some kind of direction, if you did like it: just let me know why, pretty please.. (hoping not to sound too desperate..) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well disc? It's just that I like your quirky point of view...The skewed way in which you see things. And that you can portray these images so well. I see a lot of metaphor that, of course, is open to interpretation. All of this though, is the reply from one that reads much better than he writes. I don't know what others will get from your writing, I enjoy all I've read. ~wranx |
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