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Open Poetry #30

Felinus Maximus

TwistedKnickers
Junior Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 35
Saskatchewan, Canada

0 posted 2004-01-07 12:31 PM

Cautiously, she slinks between the fragile ferns
and crouches;
her matted, empty belly wet
with last nights' rain.
Dopplar ears on alert
point in all directions independantly,
detecting the slightest rustle.
One paw frozen in mid air; eyes dilate.
She adjusts her haunches like a champion golfer,
aligning his feet for the winning putt.
With the focus of a microscope
and muddy death-hooks protruding,
she leaps expectantly across the threshold.

As the screen door snaps shut behind her,
she proudly pads to her freshly filled dish
to reap the tasty spoils
of the great morning hunt.

Poetry is the sculpting of words. We ALL start with a lump of clay.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-01-07 12:33 PM

ohhhh, this is so adorable!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2004-01-07 12:33 PM

LOL loved it!! So descriptive...

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

3 posted 2004-01-07 12:58 PM

Oh yes, I know this scene well! Amusing write! ~K~

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-01-10 10:01 PM

awwww love this... proudly pads

enjoyed.

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

5 posted 2004-01-10 10:08 PM

I love this! The first stanza had me breathless, and then the ending came at me out of the blue. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-01-10 10:52 PM

Purrrrrrfect! Loved it!

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