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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-01-07 03:46 AM



puzzle me

i want you,  
as you,  
    nothing more,
    nothing less.  
i want you  
in good days,  
    mad days,
    sad days.  
i want you  
in dark days,
    darker nights.  
i want you  
when nothing seems right  
    for you.  
i want you  
when you think it's all ending.  
i want you  
when you open your eyes  
and cry in my arms.  
i want you  
when you love me
    (edit by moderator) me  
        curl yourself up  
    against me.  
i want you  
when there's pizza sauce  
on the corner of your mouth.  
i want you  
when someone pisses you off  
    while driving.  
i want you  
when you stare at nothing  
but something in your mind.
i want you  
when the night is quiet  
and the day too loud.  

i want you.  
i've always wanted you.
i've always known that  
there was a puzzle piece of me  
    that i didnt have.

and when i found you,  
    i saw it,
and you fit me,  
and i fit you,
and though we are different,
we are
o
n
e.  
©snow'04



"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-07-2004 07:44 AM).]

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1 posted 2004-01-07 04:32 AM


yeah...I've felt like this before...and maybe still do but won't admit it
Michelle_loves_Mike
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2 posted 2004-01-07 11:14 AM



"and when i found you,  
    i saw it,
and you fit me,  
and i fit you,
and though we are different,
we are "
o
n
e.  
exactly,,,,,cept,,,,I'm usually the one that loses it while driving,,,,
much enjoyed
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

DavePage
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3 posted 2004-01-07 02:00 PM


I like the almost hynoptic beat rising to the call.

Simple, meaningful, direct, echoing to an inward song.

Dave

McLean
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4 posted 2004-01-07 02:06 PM


I do so like puzzles.  Nice when you find that missing piece.  Kudos.

McLean

Snow
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5 posted 2004-01-09 01:40 AM


wasn't sure this piece would actually get any comments, but here you are..and i'm thrilled.

thank you all very much!


snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda


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