Open Poetry #30 |
Stop thinking |
Terrina Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 166California |
One day I'll have to stop thinking of you. Today is not that day, tomorrow is not looking good. I should kill these crazy feelings, probably would if I could, but here they stand, like there they stood. Just when I begin to forget the process seems to hard and I let the net of regret fall over me, yet again. I bet I'll never quite be done with you, never run from you, [edited by Moderator] with thoughts of you running through my fingertips. Sounds fun, but when it's done, and my eyes open to just me, those thoughts turn to stone, and dancing and drinking beat thinking about not having you hear. Do I even blink when thoughts of you appear? Fear of falling to far due to the stars in my eyes. Wise beyond my years, I should know better, go easier on myself, I'm better off without you...keep telling myself. but am I really? Your words left me in a paradise, took me to the high rise, and my goodness, I'd never leave. But then your actions brought me to a place, where I had to face facts, and I'm left to live on the words that you used to dig me a shallow grave. And I jump in without even a thought of saving myself, it's true. One day I'll have to stop thinking of you. [This message has been edited by garysgirl (01-02-2004 07:44 PM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
one day..... not yet. Welcome to Passions, you'll like it here Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Potent write. Welcome to Passions. ThisDiamond |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your words left me in a paradise, took me to the high rise, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Loved those lines, it's a pretty heady view from there isn't it? Wonderful post, and welcome to Passions Terrina~ |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Nice quality but dont ever restrict yourself. The site will do that on language. The rawness I loved But then I came from some jungle. Nice to have your words. Dave |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I particularly liked this part: "But then your actions brought me to a place, where I had to face facts, and I'm left to live on the words that you used to dig me a shallow grave. And I jump in without even a thought of saving myself, it's true. One day I'll have to stop thinking of you." Well done and welcome to Passions. [This message has been edited by Munda (01-01-2004 05:19 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello Terrina, and welcome to Passions. I'm glad that you decided to join us. This is a very good first post. I look forward to reading more of your work. Please check your e-mail for a special greeting from all of us here at PIP. Hugs Ethel/garysgirl Moderator/Passions In Poetry |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hello and welcome to Passions. I very much enjoyed your first post. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Very good write here! Welcome! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hi and Welcome an aching first post, I can relate so well....hugsss Lauren~ ~~**~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have been there, and I haven't left yet Welcome to Passions! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Terrina~ Welcome to Passions~ 'I let the net of regret fall over me' What a poignant poetic thought~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Michelle_loves_Mike
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
sometimes, the mind tells us to let go,,,for our own good,,,,,yet, the heart tells us we can not let go,,,for the fear of being alone,,,,good write Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Welcome to Passions, Terrina...nice first post. Thank you. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Welcome, Terrina, I loved your write. There was something that most could identify through every line you wrote. Welcome to Passions. It's great to have you here. Sadelite |
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chrissydome Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 73germany |
oh, how i know how that feels! this is beautiful! turning mirrors upside down won't make dust fall off the ground, hiding wounds won't ease the pain, sleep won't make you whole again... |
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lovejunkie Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 93Indiana |
One day I'll have to stop thinking of you. Today is not that day, tomorrow is not looking good. ^--- I really like that part. Good first one. I can relate and I'm sure lots of other people can too. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've known these moments! Thanks for sharing! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
You wish you could just make yourself stop thinking about everything, everything about them... but you can't. No matter how hard you try, you can't. And even when you do stop thinking about them, every decision you make, you think about how it will affect them. And you never know if you should make yourself happy, or make them happy. Wonderful. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Welcome to Passions! Enjoyed your first post. Have fun here! Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Welcome to Passions and this was a heartfelt very thought provoking, and emotional first piece...i look forward to reading more. take care. amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Terrina, I left you a message at my post hoping you'd stop back and read it. The Professor pulled up and posted the poem I was referring. It is now posted as Haiku on Frozen Beach. (You had mentioned talent when you wrote to me. I feel like you will see real talent when you read his posts.) Have a great day. Again, I enjoyed your first write. You've got some talent there too! Sadelite |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to Pips! enjoyed this write very much, especially the 'net of regret' line. |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
A very moving write. Welcome to Passions and thank you for sharing Terrina. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) I can relate to this feeling ever so much, dearest friend, believe that you will find something even more special out there that this time will not deny or leave you behind and keep following your heart until you're rewarded of its bliss, God Bless You, this is a wonderful debut! Welcome to Passions, sweet Terrina, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Terrina, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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j0n4th4n Member
since 2003-03-11
Posts 94 |
the first few lines of this are wonderful! |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
And I jump in without even a thought of saving myself, it's true. One day I'll have to stop thinking of you. Not even a thought, Great write/ right....Glad to meet you...~C |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
But for now, think all you want and clear it up...James |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
This was a great write and how true that no matter how charismic words sound, action sometimes speaks for words. You did a great job and I thouroughly enjoyed this. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Welcome to PIP, Terina! I really thought the last two stanzas were very cleverly written. |
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