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wickedbeautifulpoetry
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0 posted 2004-01-04 07:10 PM



you once whispered
as silently as the wind
into my ear
that you loved me

that whisper withered
into something i could feel
but not know for sure
like the presence of the wind

your love for me
has faded into the sunshine
of summer
as wind dies down in heat

[This message has been edited by wickedbeautifulpoetry (01-05-2004 03:15 PM).]

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please check your email
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3 posted 2004-01-06 02:30 AM


Amazing how the way things were can hurt, and this was nicely done to show it.
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4 posted 2004-01-06 08:37 AM


"that whisper withered
into something i could feel
but not know for sure
like the presence of the wind"

very good comparison,,,,,,you can feel the wind caress you and ease away,,,as you can feel the whisper of love on your heart then sense it die,,,,,,,i like your poem
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

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5 posted 2004-01-06 08:46 AM


This poem deserves to be read slowly, with a lot of thought.  You hit it so well, WBP.  There is definitely a message here.
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6 posted 2004-01-06 10:11 AM


Katie~
Heartfelt emote~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

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7 posted 2004-01-06 10:35 AM


I actually feel this love has grown ...
that is what it conveys to me. From silent whispers to heat of passion ...
I don't know. But your write is intriguing.
Love, Margherita

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8 posted 2004-01-06 10:49 AM


always a powerful message in your poetry - you write it so well - Paul
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9 posted 2004-01-06 05:42 PM


please check your email and respond to me or any moderator of your choice! 1-6-04

~~**~~
This morning theres a calm I cant explain
By the time I recognize this moment it will be gone,  
I will bend light pretending it lingers on

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