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wordwizard
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0 posted 2004-01-06 11:23 PM



In a world of gift bearers and jokes
one and the same
they'd present themselves at your door
without any name
"pardon me lady, pardon me sir
take this boxed gift
that has you miffed
forgive my green, forgive my slur"...

Recipient facile
in boxed domiciles
snatches boxes that contain themselves
answers to the whim of the gifted elves


It's a world of bearers and courtiers alike
next door, a blue collared man's on strike
he too gets a gift of a jack in the box
that's what he got when he answered the knock...


World of necklace wearers and trinket hawkers
districts of gift givers and sock stalkers
one and the same
with endless names
there initiates a nod and jest
with chagrin you sign for the rest
regained composure once its signed
but its disclosure is a secret kind
cause you received that parceled gift
on a lonely day that had you miffed


you were a recipient facile
thronged at suburban domiciles.



© Copyright 2004 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
MARK V SHELDON
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1 posted 2004-01-07 12:08 PM


Well...  at least you got something, eh?  I like your vocabulary and the "lingering afterthought" this poem left with me.

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iliana
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2 posted 2004-01-07 01:13 AM


I have to admit I liked this a lot better the second time I read it.  I'm going to save it for a third read.
DavePage
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3 posted 2004-01-07 04:26 PM


Interesting in a lot of ways.
Multi-read.
Is it about harassed by door salespeople, friends making fools, fragments of live breaking into dormant life, a threat or a pleasure.

Dave

wordwizard
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4 posted 2004-01-08 03:41 AM


Hello friends,

I like the multiple meanings one can get for this a swell...and there are several inferences, including the foolish gift giver, the dishonest door to door salesman, the niave householder...or all in one and one in all.

Martin


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