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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2003-12-30 11:30 PM


Hang Down Your Head Tom Dooley

How did I feel in the moment
when my heart was shattered?
(As if it really mattered)
Destroyed I suppose, (I cried)
but only for that moment.
I knew I could survive,
though hard to go from
cherished to dispised.
How does it feel to be
dispised?  (laughing)
For now, I'll hold my tongue.
My feelings yet to be surmised.

JamesLee
December29
2003
Miss you Jin.
When do you begin?
Where do you end?

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-12-31 12:24 PM


oh no!
jaicie114
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2 posted 2003-12-31 12:40 PM


Dear, dear James...

You have more ups and downs than anyone I've ever imagined.  Whew...I hope this one goes back "up" quickly for you!  Thanks for the great write, as usual...

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

A B S T R A C T
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3 posted 2003-12-31 12:41 PM


I think that you have too many clichés in your poem (and one is too many already).  It seems as if this was thrown together hastily.  If you would sit down for two hours or so and put more energy into it, you may be surprised what you can come up with.

[This message has been edited by A B S T R A C T (12-31-2003 12:42 AM).]

DavePage
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4 posted 2003-12-31 12:50 PM


Love's rich pageant cuts another groove across the waiting list of savages.

The endless toil of nether
Reaches the frozen wastes of possible

Shaken hands after 50 they wonder how they were ever selected and tolerated.

Behind every married couple is a wife and a husband.

Never ask why.

Dave

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-12-31 03:53 AM


ouch

hugs to you James

Margherita
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6 posted 2003-12-31 12:21 PM


Sigh ... true love has no beginning and no end, it IS.
Very efficient write!
Love and HAPPY NEW YEAR!
Margherita

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7 posted 2003-12-31 12:32 PM


Ah sweet James...cheer up..love will come your way.


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8 posted 2003-12-31 12:44 PM


Dear James, to-morrow is a brand new year! Take heart gentle man. hugs, Chris

"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet."
-Plato



    

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9 posted 2003-12-31 01:58 PM


oh James...this is so sad...heart hugs for you
and the title? I sing that song all the time! I remember it from the third grade. hope things get better.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2003-12-31 06:14 PM


Thank you Midnitesun, jaicie, ABSTRACT, Dave, passing shadows, Margherita, Enchantress, Nighshade and Sea for reading and responding...I appreciate it...
This is old news, old feelings that come and go...actually I am doing quite well...no better or worse than usual...I like to visit all of my emotions from time to time...Happy New Year...James

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