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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-12-30 01:24 PM





I will never be the rose
elegant  blueblood,
gracious debutante
white lace gloves
and tea parties,

just can't be the rose,

ultimately doomed
shelfbound trophy lives,
defined and confined
contained in finest crystal,

let me remain here
amid the weeds
and the wildflowers
i can slip
right between them
when i need to,
here, there will be
no expectations
of me,

i can spit when i jog
and curse like a trucker
i can grow unconfined
and seep outside lines

so if perchance you
wander these weed fields,
i shall give no directions
back to conventions
i have no use
for tidying up though,
just please let me show you
the gifts of the unchartered


[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-31-2003 01:15 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-12-30 01:56 PM


May I say you err a bit?
Now don't get edgy, stay and sit
and ponder such a rose as this...
you may even get my gist...
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For you, Michelle...

garysgirl
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2 posted 2003-12-30 01:58 PM


Michele, one of the most valuable lessons I am learning in life is being taught to me by Gary....he is teaching me
to be myself if I ever want to be happy...not to
be what everyone else wants me to be or what they
try to make me in to. And what is making me so happy
about this is that he loves me...whoever or whatever I am.

This poem sounds like you have already learned
this lesson that I'm trying to learn now.
Hugs to you, sweet lady,  
Ethel

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2003-12-30 02:01 PM


so cute..so like you

I could be your twin except for this

"i can spit when i jog
and curse like a trucker
i can grow unconfined
and seep outside lines"

I was never good at spitting  
not that I tried much

hugs
M

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Michelle_loves_Mike
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4 posted 2003-12-30 05:15 PM


not to mention,,,,,,,,roses are usually a gift of last minute forgetfulness, guilt, or trying to show off,,,,,,,the wildflower picked for its simple beauty, on the whim of a sweet hearts thought,,,,,is a true treasue
Michelle

I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike

bklynboy
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5 posted 2003-12-30 09:30 PM


You are a rose....a beauty red...without the thorns. and it is ok to spit but not into the wind, or curse or do what ever you want. Pretty powerful stuff you wrote...enjoyed
BluesSerenade
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6 posted 2003-12-30 09:38 PM


You are not the rose?  Lets hope not!!!
It's a nice thought, and then there's your
incredible poem!!  I'm not a gardenia either.  

Love your sassy side, oh girlielocks~

Enchantress
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7 posted 2003-12-30 09:39 PM


"so if perchance you
wander these weed fields,
i shall give no directions
back to conventions
i have no use
for tidying up tho,
just please let me show you
the gifts of the unchartered"

I so much enjoyed this Michele.
Happy New Year!
Hugs~

    In the midst of winter..
I found there lives within me,
    an invincible summer.

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2003-12-30 09:47 PM


thanks guys and dolls
and sunshine thank you for the beautiful poem of yours to share with me

DavePage
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9 posted 2003-12-31 01:06 AM


Love it.

I hope they and your words grow forever.

Dave

passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-12-31 03:07 AM


and that is so you I love it!
Marge Tindal
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11 posted 2003-12-31 09:48 AM


Michelle~
There is such 'inspiration' in this piece ... I think I'll save it for next year !

Oh, you write so well~

Have a safe and Happy New Year !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

vandana
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12 posted 2003-12-31 09:51 AM


enjoyed
inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2003-12-31 01:16 PM


thanks foir the feedback and thanks for being part of my poetic life in 2003, hope to be here with you all in the following year, peace and love, michele
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