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She Thirsts
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She Thirsts |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I imagine you, the quiver of a pert, glossy lip... The pristine and flawless primp, those eyes, pools of swirling blue. A whisper of passion that flows from a feathered quill onto the smoothest of paper...yet... It is this that I know of you, that part which I can see, feel through my eyes. And... There is so much more unfelt, unseen, never tasted or smelled....and she thirsts.... When floods fill the plain of one’s heart, beating effortlessly, will the last breath breathed be heard, felt upon one's cheek? Or... Will the fires that burn, searing the soul.. Last into the final hours of life...wishing upon a star...once near...though ever so far away... I would reach into the heavens...as my breath is held, as my lungs burn the ache of what is held within...that I might find this dream for you...for your unseen smile is so treasured by me. [This message has been edited by Magnus (12-29-2003 04:59 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh my, but she will like this... whoever she is |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh goodness, Barry...she, your muse, allowed your pen these words? You're smokin', bud! Gosh, when those breakthroughs break loose...look out! An incredible piece of work! I read this one about a half dozen times before I could respond. I am going back again... Patricia |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
She is a friend, much in love... IF only I had a baseball bat....that I might smack him upside the head with...and knock some sense into him, for her. Thanx Kacy.. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
AWWWWWWWesome! Took my breath away! lol......jo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Me thinks my muse is AHHHHLLLLLLIIIIIIIVVVVE. Thanx ladies, thank you Patricia, thank you Iliana.... we aim to please... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now that was a beautiful piece of work Barry, but be careful with that baseball bat  I can't even quote a favorite part of this as I would copy the entire of it. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Sharon....it was a Nerfball bat... harmless....but perhaps a "waker-upper"... Thanx, glad you enjoyed.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic Barry... Obviously the lady is not me... My eyes are green not blue.  Well done! Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Darn, I thought I had the eyes all figured out!! Nancy.............Green? Sheeesh! Just teasin'....I know you already are hooked up quite well with your own love of life.... A very fortunate man.... Thanx Nance... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
(grrrrrrrr stupid computer) My eyes are brown....*sigh* I hope she knows how lucky she is to have you for a friend. And by the way...stunning piece. "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Purrrrrrrrfect. Sighing here. hugs, Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I would reach into the heavens...as my breath is held, as my lungs burn the ache of what is held within...that I might find this dream for you...for your unseen smile is so treasured by me. Wow, Barry in romantic version, is quite an experience! Wonderful write. Love, Margherita  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Susan, perhaps next time I will leave off the eye color...thereby opening up the options of what if???? LOL! Thanx....mucho bunches... Thanx for the Purrrrr Chris....enjoyed... glad you did too.. Margherita...this is a side of me that I truly enjoy delving into from time to time. Thank You! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You are quite something! All friendships are treasure Barry, and some treasure is just priceless Hugs, TD |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...you are pretty amazing!  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow sir.....Sigh.... what a beauty this is.....you have such a soft way of speaking romance....hugss Lauren~ ~~**~~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes K. some treasures are priceless, aren't they...even old treasure, tarnished, lacking a little lustre...polish. Right, 147? Tanx Martie-Partie... You are pretty amazing too..... Lauren, I always enjoy being called "SIR".. sheesh..... I know, I know....you were raised to respect your elders.... Thanx Greeneyes....I mean that...thanx... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Barry, I do believe that your muse is very much alive!! This is awesome!! I had a favorite part to quote, but decided not to, because it's all so beautiful. I didn't want to leave anything out!!  Hugs, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so selfless and beautiful |
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Lady Ollyne Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 337East Coast |
Sir Magnus, "for your unseen smile is so treasured by me" Such words can fill one's heart to overflowing. Touched, am I, in having caught them this morn. Respectfully, Lady Ollyne [This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (12-30-2003 06:54 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When floods fill the plain of one’s heart, beating effortlessly, will the last breath breathed be heard, felt upon one's cheek? Or... Will the fires that burn, searing the soul.. Last into the final hours of life...wishing upon a star...once near...though ever so far away... ~*~ I've read you long enough, often enough, to know that you are reaching a new stride in your writing, Magnus...and you're taking it on very well. Very well indeed. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ Florida's eyes *smile* ... you are just such a wonderful writer dearest one~ Happy New Year's blessings to you and yours~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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