Open Poetry #30 |
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What Might Have Been (response to Sue's 'Time to Mend') |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion ![]() |
It's not from the time long since, That makes the pain so intense. It's the time you had before, That makes the loss so much more. The words flow as do the tears, As you contemplate the years, You knew back then were still ahead, But now are lost to you, instead. Your lover's hand now grips your heart, Where once it caressed to impart The desire, now lost, within your grief, Replaced by tears and disbelief. The ache that burns is a brand, That leaves scars you cannot stand. And so you seek o'er and o'er again, To ease the pain of what might have been. With each phrase that you craft, You remove another arrow's shaft, From the heart that was pierced through When there was one from the two of you. The day will come when the pain has passed, The regrets will fade, the shadows cast Upon your soul will wane to naught, And your faith in love will again be sought. Until that time when you slake your pain, With the tears you pour as dense as rain, Take solace in knowing that your pen, Will guide you through what might have been. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (12-29-2003 02:00 PM).] |
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harash Member
since 2003-12-27
Posts 99India |
Lng...this is great..how beautifully you worded..ah!!nice.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're a good Sailor, you are... ![]() |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
If I was as good a sailor as you are Great a Lady, I would be content with what I have learned, Karilea. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LJA...This is very touching and a lovely gifting of poetry. Hug! |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
SailorMan, this is such a sweet and compassionate write. Your kind heart is showing, my friend. ![]() Hugs to you, ![]() Ethel |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi ya, Martie - I hope you have love in your life and inspiration in your heart. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Oh yea..throw in a mushy one....swoon the ladies..yea, I know your type.... good write anyway... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Take solace in knowing that your pen, Will guide you through what might have been." Wonderful wonderful write full of such wise words. *note to Toe*------YES he makes me swoon! So there. ![]() ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ In the midst of winter.. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
That's right, Toe! Nancy knows what she's talking about. You just go ahead and swoon, Nancy. I'll sit right here by your side and pat your hand as I peak down your blouse - heh |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh my! This is such a surprise. And, so beautiful. Thank you so much for this. I am going to print this out and keep it. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kind words to a friend....and well done. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Now you got me almost crying. Such a lovely and thoughtful response for our Sue. Big mouth but a little heart on the right place, ain't that you sailor. If I could I would hug you tight (but don't tell Deer and Toe!!!) You're in my book of friends man. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
The day will come when the pain has passed, The regrets will fade, the shadows cast Upon your soul will wane to naught, And your faith in love will again be sought. Truthful words....sounds like from experience perhaps. Very well done & going into my library! Swooning and sighing here. hugs, Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A write from the heart, John. believe in what your heart feels... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you very much for your wonderful words of encouragement. As for you, Sue: I wrote this poem specifically for you; although, it applies equally to us all, doesn't it? I hope you keep it, and I hope you follow the advice therein. You're a beautiful person. |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
LngJhnAg...I love this poem. I do not write poetry well at all...but I can write prose and I love reading poetry like this. "one from two" has so much meaning for me. You must be a very sensitive man. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LongJohn~ Good to see you ... and this is a wonderfully done piece for our SuzieQ~ Happy New Year sentiments to you and yours~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well God luv ya! You are one tender-hearted soul you are. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Says a lot...and tenderly...James |
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