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vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

0 posted 2003-12-23 03:21 AM

silence
be the
aftermath of
deja vu in play
again...

circular of
circumspect
contracting as
cocoon

rewound

and seeds to ground
lie buried here
where once a
fertile soil lay
enriched with
substance -
bred of good...

misunderstood

this root in rot now
tainted
with a
shadowing
of matters less
and overlooked
one pure of heart is
fallen
calling
reverence for the
simple need of

silence

in the
aftermath
of
was

~Vicky L. Raynes

"So here I am with pockets full of good intentions
But none of them will comfort me tonight..."
~The Carpenters

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-23-2003 09:39 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2003-12-23 04:43 AM

There is a wonderful rhythm in this poem!
… and substance!
Love, Margherita

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

2 posted 2003-12-23 09:14 AM

one pure of heart is
fallen
calling
"reverence for the
simple need of

silence

in the
aftermath
of
was"
This write is very moving, very creative..... ~K~

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-12-23 09:26 AM

"silence

in the
aftermath
of
was"

Beautiful!! Love this sweet lady!
Hugs~

~Let peace begin with me...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-12-23 11:10 AM

Makes me feel that sometimes
even our best isn't good enough!

Great poem, however sad it is.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2003-12-23 04:18 PM

Hope you're ok beautiful.

M

"I can't believe
I've lost the very best of me"

Natalie Merchant

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2003-12-23 10:44 PM

Wonderful write my friend - thoroughly enjoyed.

jwesley

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2003-12-23 10:58 PM

Vicky...This packes a punch...quite a beautiful one!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-12-24 01:23 AM

can I have this one, please????

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

9 posted 2003-12-24 02:38 AM

I'm gonna keep this in my library, k?
don't know what else to say really...
I love it

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2003-12-24 05:01 AM

it does happen just like that

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

11 posted 2003-12-24 06:20 AM

Wonderous...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

12 posted 2003-12-24 08:17 AM

Just like all of your poems, this is beautiful. MERRY CHRISTMAS!

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

13 posted 2003-12-24 08:38 AM

Way to go, Vicky! Terrific metaphor! I love the way you blended everything together so well. Have a wonderful holiday season.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

14 posted 2004-01-20 10:23 PM

Seems, those good of heart are most misunderstood.

enjoyed the way your words fit together...

hugs, g

"Now would you mind if I bared my soul / If I came right out and said you're beautiful..." B. Adams

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