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Questions In A Ruined Woods
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Questions In A Ruined Woods |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
On discovery, I wonder, who harnessed Breathless metal to petroleum's fire That has destroyed this steep slope, Judged it waste as it stood And distressed the delicate balance of things, Erasing all beauty from this space; That my spirits health requires? * A sword blades-wave has scraped Off Hessian soldiers that dressed red The ancient rocks. Napoleon, was your quest To gain this little world for France? What goal made you drive steel elephants, ( Hannibal), up these low alps To crush the life from the wild rhodora That has cried its last mauve tears Into the poisoned spring? Unteathered it from its moor And left a broken, tangled thing? * Weak, I am , alone, army none Unable to defend the flattened pines, And ghosts of hemlock groves All smashed, and bent earth-level These that once played music note's Through needle reeds, like flutes; The air death-quite now, Silent of those ancient songs That their creator wrote. * Why did you come here, second Hitler To destroy this delicate slope, By an evil program That destroyed life,like found errant Jews And left behind but mud and bones? [This message has been edited by ice (12-19-2003 10:22 PM).] |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
The title here should be "Questions In A Ruined Woods" sorry about that..:-( Is there a way to edit poems once they are posted to fix mistakes like this? _______ice ><> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this write. To edit the title...go up to the icons beside the posted time at the top of the poem. The third from the left icon is 'edit'...click on it...go to the 'subject' where your title appears and make your changes. Then hit 'submit' at the bottom of the poem. Okay? Hugs~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Enchantress, Thank you, I fixed it.....ice |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You are very welcome....I love the piece!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice -- in a word, brilliant. BEEEEEEEEE well. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
another one for me to read more than once ****************************************** What goal made you drive steel elephants, ( Hannibal), up these low alps To crush the life from the wild rhodora That has cried its last mauve tears Into the poisoned spring? dramatically presented  well done |
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Minister Joe Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 78TX, USA |
ice-- The last line in your last strophe, "mud and bones" Good tangible image--though horrible--just goes to show sometimes expansive language isn't needed for the most effective imagery. Your tone was consistent throughout and helped push the poem along, good job. --Matt |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Solidly built. While reading, I could only think of William Randolph Hearst, father of yellow journalism (tabloids) and staunch advocate for the timber/wood pulp industry and geological rape. But I digress. Very good poem, Ice. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
iliana Thank you, your flattering comment is also illuminating....:-) Midnightsun Bulldozers remind me of steel elephants...they can be used to exploit or nurture, this time they performed the job of the former.. Thanks for your nice comment MJ The horror here is only temporary, although as you see it drove me to write this....My faith is always in the unconquerable ability for the earth to heal itself...This was a second growth woods, so it has been raped once already and I have already imagined it healing itself from the accostation.. Thank you for your reply...:-) Alicat Thank you, I know about Hurst, have been to his castle that was built from pulp, what a waste to print such garbage on the backs of uncountable ruined Forests. Martie "Excellent" is an excellent word to see in a reply, Happy to see you think it so.....:-) ******************************************** Thank you all for reading and replying ________ice ><> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ice, this was a very well written poem..... very interesting. If the forest could only talk...... Hugs, Ethel (By the way, after you edit a poem, you can fix it so that the writing that says it has been edited doesn't show. You put < font color="bfdfff" > taking the space from in front of the "<" and the ">". You put in whatever color the web page is.) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you GG For the nice comments and the info about corrections.. ______ice ><> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Wow, the "second Hitler" part really got my attention especially, and in a way, that is ever so true as Mother Nature and all her sentinels are just like the priests and sages of the Earth that the greed of man just murder deliberately! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, may our Mother Earth heal through faith, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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