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Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

0 posted 2003-12-19 04:38 PM

Lady Of The East

Lady of the East you call to me;
who would be fair without beauty,
beautiful without grace
graceful without love, and
who is loved without reason.
My body crumbles inward
toward the empty ache,
your absence palpable.
A shape of emptiness fills me;
it is outlined in lack, and
colored in tones of naked longing.
Lady, end my great alone;
I will you here, will you rise like a sun
and fly to me over ocean, land.
Oh lady of the East, I call to you.

Kaz

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-12-19 04:39 PM

I can feel the longing in this piece. Awesome write.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Steve Motuel
Member

since 2003-12-19

Posts 72
Bergen auf Ruegen, Germany

2 posted 2003-12-19 04:42 PM

a lovely piece with room for the imagination

Steve

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2003-12-19 04:58 PM

who is loved without reason.

Which is the only reason to love. *S* This beauty reminds me why I've missed reading your work. *S*

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2003-12-19 05:28 PM

"toward the empty ache,
your absence palpable.
A shape of emptiness fills me;"

Especially liked these lines. Thanks for the post. .......jo

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

5 posted 2003-12-19 06:36 PM

Nice, very nice. I like the way you close this in with the first and last lines.

And for you, I hope she comes.

~~J

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
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6 posted 2003-12-20 10:01 AM

"My body crumbles inward
toward the empty ache,
your absence palpable."

Jealous here....I wish I'd written these lines. Think this one goes into my library....

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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2003-12-20 10:06 AM

Kazm,
Well done, enjoyed the read.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-12-20 10:08 AM

OUTSTANDING!
making me crumble here, just a bit, with envy

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-20-2003 10:09 AM).]

Kazm
Member

since 2003-11-13

Posts 99

9 posted 2003-12-20 01:50 PM

I'm glad everybody liked my poem. I worked hard to make it good enough for putting here. Most of my things aren't. It feels good to be told that I succeeded a little.

Kaz

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2003-12-20 03:21 PM

I'm glad for my forgetfulness in not adding this to my library... for it gives me the chance to read your response... and say you're a poet I watch for... your work is most definitely worth posting here! *S*

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2003-12-22 05:54 PM

Goodness sakes, your poem is lovely.
I'd say you succeeded, a lot!!!
Keep up the good work, it is truly a pleasure to read you Kazm.

Happy Holidays to you good poet!

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