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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-12-17 10:34 PM

Naked Wood

he said I was good at endings
never was there ever a truer statement
the middles were the times that seemed
to cause the most of the problems
when the sheen of new wears off with time
and I become only bare naked wood
where before they had just seen who
it was they wished for through their gloss
it wasn’t that I had changed any
they just hadn’t wanted to see me
and middles to ends seem
to slide down way too fast
I wish someone could see me
with sand paper eyes
the kind that sees through to the things
that really matter to a real man
who knows that true beauty
shows clearly in a heart
recognizing styles come and go
but pure quality last a lifetime
that sand runs quickly through fingers
but boulders have the weight of bulk
knowing some arms leave you emptier than before
and some you feel tightly when away
a reality much sweeter than any fantasy
with a tender touch being the strength
to make you weak in the knees
yes, I am good at endings
waiting to meet my middle

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2003-12-17 10:44 PM

"knowing some arms leave you emptier than before
and some you feel tightly when away
a reality much sweeter than any fantasy"

exactly

excellent

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2003-12-18 10:10 AM

I hope you know how really good this is.

I love the title...of course being male, my little mind wandered a bit... *grin*

I don't want to post all my thoughts on the ideas in this, I feel somehow like I am intruding into an area that is too true and too personal. I just leave it at this is really good in more ways than one.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2003-12-18 10:14 AM

This is really good.

and I had to pop in and say merry, merry to you.

and this part?

"I wish someone could see me
with sand paper eyes
the kind that sees through... "

It's amazing when that happens, h.

All pretense dropped--and smile, promptly replaced with intense.

Happy Holidays, lady.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-12-18 10:19 AM

1slick_lady
Excellent, I am impressed. Happy Holiday.

lamplighter
New Member

since 2003-12-18

Posts 8
Virginia, USA

5 posted 2003-12-18 10:25 AM

Wow... I'll be reading this again and again, I'm sure. Excellent.

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

6 posted 2003-12-18 11:08 AM

How truly profound this is! You've hit it perfectly. Those darn middles have a way of dashing all the expectations. The way you described this is pure genious.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-12-18 01:51 PM

I'm not good at any of it anymore...

but I was there once and know exactly what you mean

another fantastic bittersweet write

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

8 posted 2003-12-18 02:13 PM

"I wish someone could see me
with sand paper eyes
the kind that sees through to the things
that really matter to a real man"

Really liked this part. Very interesting write.

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

9 posted 2003-12-18 06:17 PM

"knowing some arms leave you emptier than before"

Ain't that the risky truth!

"I wish someone could see me
with sand paper eyes
the kind that sees through..."

Nice to find such originality.

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

10 posted 2003-12-18 07:35 PM

great poem - wow worth reading several times - paul

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2003-12-22 05:26 PM

Nice...James

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