Open Poetry #30 |
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The Once Wilted Rose |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA ![]() |
It came...a breeze that fluttered a lid. A soft moving of air that caused me to inhale deeply, attempting to smell the roses that once grew nearby. I stood there, gently touching the wilted leaf, the now dried petals falling softly to the hard earth. I held that tattered rose, feeling the coolness of the stalk, the sharpness of each barb...a finger gliding effortlessly along the stem. And I flinched as a thorn drew a drop of red, red mingling with the pale, lifeless petals...bringing fresh life to the wilt...even if only what was seen, the facade... Bring to me the freshness of a rose.....that I might tenderly hold, touch, smell a breath of heaven... For when I do...my eyes see you there....smiling, ever smiling...as I hold the rose...delicately until life returns to the smooth cool stem....a new bud, a new rose...growing anew...as you smile in my dreams. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Oh Barry! Your words are as smooth as silk and as awe inspiring as ever. I wish you much love and happiness throughout Christmas and the New Year and I thank you for your friendship, inspiration and encouragement. Take care Love Sue I am in motion |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Magnus, this -- "Bring to me the freshness of a rose.....that I might tenderly hold, touch, smell a breath of heaven... For when I do...my eyes see you there....smiling," -- flows like magic to me! I am not a critic, rather an affirmer of what touches me about words. These did. Thank you. [This message has been edited by iliana (12-17-2003 09:57 PM).] |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sue, it always is a pleasure to give you a piece of my mind which so much is a part of my poetry....sometimes just dreams... sometimes more....thank you. Iliana, love the name...a world of words could be written of a woman with that name. Thanx for your thoughts....I have been in the background most of the past week or so, and my muse has deserted me...until tonite. Thanx again... Barry |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Words as soft as rose petals dear Magnus. Enjoyed this read to-night. hugs, Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Bring to me the freshness of a rose.....that I might tenderly hold, touch, smell a breath of heaven..." Oh *SIGH*....you know Barry.... you just know! ![]() ~Hugs, Smiles & Sighs, Nancy~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
All good dreams my friend. TD |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Beautifully written Magnus, I really enjoyed it. Tony. ![]() |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
A terrific metaphor, Barry. Perfectly written. |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh my, Barry, this is so beautiful. Since roses are my favorite flower of all time, I especially loved it. Thank you for sharing. Hugs, ![]() |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
smooth as silk indeed....lovely Barry |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Barry - lovely poetry smooth as silk - so many wonderful, powerful, and troubing images can be evokded in rose imagery - great poem - Paul |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
and a very valuable dream at that smooth flowing roses winking with dreams in their eyes, and ours as well Barry this was a very pretty write. Merry Christmas |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...Thank you for reminding me how the rose touches so many...I have grown calus, working with them so much in the flowershop...they are not an easy flower, but when given with love, they have a great deal of meaning...as does your poem. Hugs, dear man! |
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Steve Motuel Member
since 2003-12-19
Posts 72Bergen auf Ruegen, Germany |
Hello Barry This is a sweet poem that reaches into the heart... Steve |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sometimes it takes a prick (hush Karen) to remind us we live and bleed. Enjoyed this very much. |
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