Open Poetry #30 |
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On The Surface |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA ![]() |
I only have this song to sing, a song which can't be heard. I would sing you everthing, but my song, it has no words. Back over all the years, I know it wasn't real. but of all the strangers that I touched, your touch I seemed to feel. This mood will pass; the pain will end; the tide will roll back down. And you will drift back fathons deep. I will come around. For now I have this song to sing, but no one hears the words. I don't pretend to know them I never really learned. Empty tunes -- no solice, I take refuge with this pen. At least I surface something. . . It's said that it did end. It's sad remembering then. Iliana |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Very nice rhythm to your words, Jo. I enjoyed them...rolls right off the tongue. M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
M -- thanks for your comment. When I wrote this one, I really was drowning in a sea of tears; I'm just fine now. You never forget a great love, right? [This message has been edited by iliana (12-17-2003 08:45 PM).] |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is soft and tender, and sooo soo sad....well done... ![]() |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I reallllly liked this. It flows so nicely. Sadie |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Very nice... ![]() Terri~ ![]() Well I will go down with this ship |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very nice but sad -you write of emotion with powerful images - paul |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sea, Sadie, Terri & Paul, thanks for your comments. Yes, 'twas a very sad time in my life, but now long past. BEEEEEEE well. |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nice to know this is "past history"... Love the flow of the words within the lines. Smooth... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Jo I absolutely loved this and your words really touched my heart. Thank you for sharing your immense talent with us here. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
nice flow...enjoyed the read ![]()
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I agree, I love the flow to this...and the sadness. You've helped me feel things I need to feel in order to move on, and there is much comfort in that. ~K~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Magnus -- thanks for your sweet words. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sue, you are too kind! Glad you read it. Take care.....jo [This message has been edited by iliana (12-18-2003 12:36 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ecrivan -- glad you stopped by, and thank you for your feedback. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kahlil -- how wonderful your comment made me feel. I hope you can move on -- there is always more love if we are open to it, but this you know. [This message has been edited by iliana (12-18-2003 12:40 AM).] |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This, I think..... /pip/Forum81/HTML/003215.html Yes, definitely that. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ratleader -- Thanks for posting -- always enjoy your comments (as well as your writing). |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... and RL's link made the circle complete. *S* |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Enjoyed muchly! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern --- yes, RL's link was a perfect ending! Thanks for stopping in. Koko -- thanks for your comments, friend. |
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