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Insubordinate Eyes - Serenity's challenge from a LONG time ago
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Insubordinate Eyes - Serenity's challenge from a LONG time ago |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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'tis the silence that is dreaded most when darkness comes - surrounds me when shadows dance their dance of discontent... playing silhouettes of one upon these tainted walls and staring, I... with insubordinate eyes in questioning of why... of this... of here and now... and you...tonight... and how?... how can empty be so filled with aching and why tonight do the tears defy me once again? ~Vicky L. Raynes Karen posted this challenge a very long time ago. /pip/Forum7/HTML/000500.html At the time, I saved my favorite phrases, and knew that one day I would use one of them. Today is 'one day'.  Thank you, Karen...and your children, for the inspiration.  When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-17-2003 02:43 AM).] |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
oo la la...I love the movement of this piece...thank you for sharing ---Alana |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky how can empty be so filled with aching I can relate to this, my friend. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Vicky...this is Wonderful!! As soon as I get a sec I'm going to look up the challenge. Hugs~ ~Let peace begin with me... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This is really beautiful, Vicky. If I were to write about insubordinate eyes, my poem would have to use words like bust, and chest, and stammering, and cleavage, and things like that. I'll have to think about writing something like that...heh |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
So glad you saved those phrases Vicky, this is beautiful! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
how can empty be so filled with aching ================== whoa -- that verse went thru me.... So I see how it works, ya let those phrases simmer and in time ya end up with a beautiful poem. Good to see you posting groovy girl. I can remember Forever December, |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hello, sweet lady!! This is so beautiful. I'm so glad that you saved these phrases. You know that I think your writing is awesome!! I've been missing you, my friend!! Hugs,  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile--y'should hear what they're saying these days... and vicky, what you did with a simple flip remark from my son is amazing...you gave it depth and angst and yes, movement. Wonderful job, my sista!  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"how can empty be so filled with aching" ooohh, now that may be the philosophical question of the day... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
how can empty be so filled with aching and why tonight do the tears defy me once again? I think you've peeked in and written my life. *S* Excellent work! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
LOL..That's some challenge she put out there! Interesting phrases from children...but then, they are children of a poet...  enjoyed your write Vick! hugs, g "Now would you mind if I bared my soul / If I came right out and said you're beautiful..." B. Adams |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was really outstanding. The flow of your words is lovely. |
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