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Open Poetry #30

Dreadful Slavery

titch k
Member

since 2003-11-25

Posts 123

0 posted 2003-12-13 07:19 PM

Let's keep this short!
So little time for meandering;
Rubbing my warm body
against all human feelings;
In their own course to flow

Giant rocks, no longer check,
grudges ploughed!
Calling among the oaks,
madness took you up
Dreadful slavery; Am I right?

All this time, few will cheer;
Sending rain, flawlessly green
Blighted Spirit; You obliging scoundrel!
Look where you put your feet; Thrown
backwards, time and time again!

Titch

The year is going,
moved Earth and Heaven;
That which we are, we are
Come my friends, moans
rounds, many voices;
Loves carves, clear cut silence;

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

1 posted 2003-12-14 11:10 AM

Hello, titch!
I really liked your first verse. It may have been strong enough to stand on its own.
Have a good day.
Sadelite

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-12-14 11:36 AM

Titch
Interesting write, enjoyed.

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