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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
Revised 10-01-2003 Lost in fractal images of my life Coupling abstract phrases eluding the mind Abuse of space with wasted words Time spent on mind candy which rot the souls teeth I sip the wine of discontent and sop the soup of delusion with the bread of mindlessness and the dread of timelessness Contemplating intropsection remembering forgotten thoughts As I peer around the edge of the sky Into the eternity of now © Copyright 2003 Joseph D. Carreno II Peace, Joe in the big MT seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries [This message has been edited by n2dmystic (10-03-2003 09:47 AM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I enjoyed this, Joe...especially these lines... "I sip the wine of discontent and sop the soup of delusion with the bread of mindlessness and the dread of timelessness" I like the changes you made in the revision as well. In my opinion, it is the better or the two. Nicely done, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
Great stuff here....mind candy- rotting souls........ I like Misuse of space with it's three "s" sounds, but what do I know....other than THIS IS GOOD STUFF! Larry [This message has been edited by dingusjr (10-02-2003 06:16 AM).] |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
edited thanks to vl. i appreciate your input Peace, Joe |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Enjoyed. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yes, you deploy well the weapons used in the battle for the mind...nice work |
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