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Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-09-22 01:31 AM

Together, we have matched a universe.
Coiled downward in haste,
do I serve your lips well enough, for now..

As soon as wind beckons my heaven, I
will chase what isn't there.
Having lost it all .. a vibration of time,
I won't find you here..
For miles apart we touch not eachother.

To ease my pain, I will weep,
my heart no longer sacred.. You
will leave me
behind.

Love is contradictory in such a world,
I will not perish with you..
And in heartbreak I sing to the sky we once shared.

My lips have curved, oh, so gently to tend
to your kiss.. I have watered the futility
of this aging sacrifice..

And only to play, a sad string of violin..
blowing a kiss as you fly away.

Together, we have fallen apart.

gringakiwi
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since 2003-08-05

Posts 189

1 posted 2003-09-22 01:35 AM

Kaoru
I really enjoyed this, and its going in my library. well done, I understand, my friend.
Connie.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-09-22 01:38 AM

As soon as wind beckons my heaven, I
will chase what isn't there.
Having lost it all .. a vibration of time,
I won't find you here..

Oh darn, this hurts so bad!!!
Right when I had made up my mind,
you made me turn and look back!!

Smile Kaoru...please~

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

3 posted 2003-09-22 02:06 AM

well expressed,,,,

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-09-22 04:49 AM

a very deep ache here

heartpiper
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since 2003-09-02

Posts 57

5 posted 2003-09-22 08:06 AM

Love is always about "falling apart" and "walking away"

It occurs this way in a starnge assonance, "a vague riddle" that can not find answers.

You have touched the hearts

Iyad

"Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers."
Khalil Gibran

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2003-09-22 09:19 AM

Oh Meg this was stunning..

Susan

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2003-09-22 09:42 AM

Good God Meg, yes:

Together, we have fallen apart.

Couldnt have said it better . . .
Yes indeed . . .
Beautiful writing
xxoo

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2003-09-22 09:46 AM

"And only to play, a sad string of violin..
blowing a kiss as you fly away.

Together, we have fallen apart."

~ So sad--but so well-written!!!

Loving, healing hugs,
Linda

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-09-22 10:36 AM

Sadly beautiful, Meghan...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

10 posted 2003-09-22 11:36 AM

Meg, you are a lady of wisdom and a full heart of caring thoughts...you will prevail...and conquer this pain and heartache and from it attain to a higher plain of thought...and you will see how all will enhance and this love will never be lost. Many hugs

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

11 posted 2003-09-22 12:56 PM

I feel the ache and sadness here.

Crystal

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

12 posted 2003-09-22 02:21 PM

That caused me to shiver.

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

13 posted 2003-09-22 02:56 PM

"Together, we have fallen apart"
honest humility is a rare thing, seems, these days...you wear them well!

Rf

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

14 posted 2003-09-22 06:23 PM

I can't help but feel
that you can make it on your own.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

15 posted 2003-09-22 06:30 PM

"My lips have curved, oh, so gently to tend
to your kiss.. I have watered the futility
of this aging sacrifice..

And only to play, a sad string of violin..
blowing a kiss as you fly away.

Together, we have fallen apart."

If an 'ache' can be beautiful...this is it!!
Wow! Amazing write here Meghan.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

16 posted 2003-09-22 11:10 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Love can indeed be contradictory, just as so many other things in life can be! (sad sigh) Take that to heart and know love will come peeking around the corner when you least expect it, sweet friend, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

mytuesdaywishes
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since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

17 posted 2003-09-22 11:43 PM

"Together, we have fallen apart."

so many meanings for a few simple words. your poem so closely reflects real life that i dont know where my lost friends and loves end and your story begins. great feel.

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

18 posted 2003-09-24 04:04 PM

you breathe it, you bleed it you are a poet

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

19 posted 2003-09-24 07:26 PM

NIce writing...James

Mordecai's Mommy
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since 2003-09-24

Posts 12
San Miguel, Ca

20 posted 2003-09-24 07:32 PM

Wow. This was really good. I could feel your pain as I read this. I very much enjoyed your poem. Thanks

Mordecai's Mommy

Like a dove, I am now flying free

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