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strings0305
New Member

since 2003-10-01

Posts 6

0 posted 2003-10-01 10:16 PM

bent over and straining to listen

I never heard a word,
except that quiet, dull mutter
quite dull.

Speak up.
your words still
flit
float,
burnt by candle flames.
ears are made for screaming,
exclaiming, shouting, cheering,
roaring, yelling, applauding
shrieking-
but not that quiet, dull mutter that
flit
floats,
out of your toobusy mouth.

I never heard a word
sewn together lips,
or a lead tongue?

or too busy chasing hell's colors.
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Let me know what you think.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

1 posted 2003-10-01 10:20 PM

First off let me welcome you to Passions.This is a great place full of great people.This write is good.It pouts the thought out there vividly of what we sometimes hear or don't hear.Well done.

Crystal

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2003-10-02 12:34 PM

"Let me know what you think."

I think it's darned good -- I like your style and I'm going to look for more.

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Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-10-02 01:55 AM

(sigh) This is most heartfelt, sweet friend, your imagery certainly pounds deep to the ground and creates sound waves of raw and strong emotion, I love it, I hope to read much more from you, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-10-02 02:00 AM

Oh...I like this a lot, strings.
Wonderfully written.
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2003-10-02 02:08 AM

roaring, yelling, applauding
shrieking-
but not that quiet, dull mutter that
flit
floats,
out of your toobusy mouth.

Ya huh...Loved these strings you tied together~

~welcome to the blue pages~

n2dmystic
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 253
beyond the doors of perception

6 posted 2003-10-02 03:23 AM

very strong. nice read. thank you and welcome!!! to Passions. may our flames unite

Peace, Joe
in the big MT
seeking the serendipitous magical mysteries of life's ubiquitous twisteries

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2003-10-02 06:03 PM

I think I'm going to enjoy your work very much... welcome to Passions!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2003-10-02 06:09 PM

Excellent write...very much enjoyed.
Welcome to Passions.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

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