Open Poetry #29 |
Wrap of Night |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
*Poetry only so nothing to panic about. Wrap me in the night let stars cover me I would be lost to sight within their endless sea Hold the cloak of dark and wrap me in its care for I have left no mark except for deep despair Steal the sun away to nevermore be shown and leave me cold and grey for it is all I've known Tell the stars to burn and hide behind the veil for I can't live or learn but seem to always fail Don't let dawning come but wrap me in the night I am in parts no sum and gloom is my delight The darkness is my friend and I can hide within unto the very end of night I'm dwelling in Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PANIC !!! Oh my gosh, Kethry are you okay ? Whew ... you have me SO WORRIED ! I mean, how dare you think you can write such melancholy and try to convince us that it's just poetry ? Tee-Hee ! I just adore YOU ... and your POETRY !!! Dark and lovely, lady~ *Huglets* (whether you need them or not) ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tell the stars to burn and hide behind the veil ========================== How stunning is that image and personifi...very cool!! Some muses just feel more comfortable dancing in the dark. Melancholy cadence looks good on your pen poetess Keth. "If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Keth This is a dark one alright. I'm glad it's just poetry. We've had this talk before. There's a lot of intense emotional expression here but it's written so well.. "Steal the sun away to nevermore be shown and leave me cold and grey for it is all I've known" Good expression of the subject. Would never want anyone talented like you to be so down.....I'll cheer you up at the picnic!! Eric The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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Ku'uipo Junior Member
since 2003-09-25
Posts 42 |
wrap me in the night... So complex, yet so simple... I love it... Thank you for your support... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Your words so full of emotions, so beautiful expressed, I have missed reading you! Charisma |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
actually I think we can all relate to this at one time or another well done Kethry |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) I did feel melancholy poignance reading this but I also felt comfort, believe it or not, as I truly believe the darkness should be our acquaintance because if we learn from it, then nothing seems to take us down! (sigh) I send angel comfort hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
I know just what you mean. Not everything you write that seems so dire means you are sitting on the brink...it's more like thinking out loud to hear what it sounds like. Well sort of. You know what I mean, right? Well I think so anyway. you can feel things pretty intense but it doesn't mean it's the end of the world, and most especially if you've tread those stormy waters so many times before. I know just what you are saying in this write. I loved this. Good one!!! Love, Terri~ Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Kethry, how nice it can be to wrap yourself in the comfort of night’s solitude Finding solace, in all things nocturnal Lucky for us, we have a dark time of the day Even luckier, the other half brings light Sweet dreams Kethry, and have a pleasant tomorrow! Richy |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
KEthry.. This is ..just beautiful. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kethry...I do love the night... and the dark...and I enjoyed this write. Nicely done, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, the wrap of night, I love it, I empathise, I love the structure, the flow and the subtlety. Empathy with the thought is one thing, to flow in the same river of thought is another, for who can say if the rivers current would carry me in the same direction. This is excellent use of language beloved heart. As for panic, yes of course I am, witness me here with the phone in my hand. (Admittedly I’m only contacting publishers and begging them to take up the options before you get too talented for them to afford.) I on the other hand am rubbing my hands in glee at the prospect of you earning me a pretty penny. (Although why one penny is prettier than another is I can’t possibly say). Now beloved mush, mush, while the muses are bubbling go and write, its time to crack the whip again. (This job is definitely affecting me, why do I have visions of studded leather and racks?) Whatever, go and write some more. and forever Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kethry A good strong write, enjoyed. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Kethry...Glad you gave us a warning. The poem is wonderful. powerful and sad and oh yes VERY GOOD. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Intense excellence, my friend. *S* |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
suthern, did I ever tell you when my husband and I were first married we loved camping...I guess you could say we were two in-tents. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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