Open Poetry #29 |
In A Fond September Farewell |
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
~ §§ ~In A Fond September Farewell~ §§ ~ Tattered, worn, slippers tremble on tiptoes through the last breathes of September. Ever so softly she hums Her woebegone chant under bated breath rising and falling like the silence between impulsive clatters of thunder or lightening. Already half naked, her torn and tattered skirt of summer snags on every grasping breeze, sending a mixture of brilliant crimson, sierra, and gold sequins flying from her faded party dress. In an “oh my!” sigh, variegated cracklings under her grass-licked slippers emblaze virgin trails marking fall's beckoning. Slowing reaching down She sadly winks rain filled eyes, throwing a final kiss to the wind, In a fond September farewell. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (09-30-2003 06:18 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh my, Sharon... I swear your poetry is just getting better and better lately. This is one of the most beautiful pieces I've ever read from your pen. Absolutely gorgeous, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky When the power of love overcomes the |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Already half naked, her torn and tattered skirt of summer snags on every grasping breeze, sending a mixture of brilliant crimson, sierra, and gold sequins flying from her faded party dress. ==================================== stunning poetic mix of imagery and personifi Sharon...very cool write and pic. So good to see you here today. "If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know how far your poetry has brought you... but do you even realize how far you've come? This is exquisite, and humbly libraried... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Thank you 3 ladies for reading this one, even I kind of liked it (hope that is okay to say oh well!) And as for you Sunshine the answer is - a long way baby! LOL |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
My goodness Sharon...this is stunning! Your style and presentation are absolutely beautiful. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon...I was mourning September on this last day...wanting to write something to her beauty...and you have done it, and so much better than I ever could. Just beautiful! and thank you! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is soooooooo beautiful and made me cry as this reminded me of when I was a little boy and autumn broke my heart truly because the flowers were dying and the butterflies flittering away and it made me feel dead! (wipes tears) Autumn doesn't sadden me as much as it used to but I still prefer the spring ever so much more, God Bless You, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is really beautiful, Shaorn. You captured the essence of September beautifully...I LIKE it!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My goodness gracious (as she shyly peeks around the corner), and sees, these wonderful words, and then she screams, "Wow I can not believe Mikey liked it!" Martie you honor me as you are my idol you know that and Nancy Lee, as always you are so very, very kind. Thank you. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Sharon, this was simply wonderful! Janet Marie beat me to the quote.... I especially like your use of leaves as sequines on a party dress. I love summer..... She left the party too soon for me. Falls a gorgeous gal but her party-pooper half sister, Winter is always lurking around the corner. Glad I popped in for a read tonight. This one is going into my library. Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, this is just the most beautiful poem......from the title all the way to the last word. These last two verses just top it all off!! In an “oh my!” sigh, variegated cracklings under her grass-licked slippers emblaze virgin trails marking fall's beckoning. Slowing reaching down She sadly winks rain filled eyes, throwing a final kiss to the wind, In a fond September farewell. I love it and I'm going to keep it, too. I hope that you don't mind? Hugs Ethel |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Hi Sharon, What a beautiful way to look at the breadth of Autumn! How could one not be fond of this fabulous farewell? So Very Poignant! Richy |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sharon, you portray her so beautifully I am in awe of this, truly and of you *smile* xxoo |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh my, oh my, OH MY! Sharon, this leaves me completely speechless. Hon, there aren't enough adjectives in our language to describe how much I loved this. I don't know what's in your tea, but girl, your poetry has gone the realm of imagination. Huggles of admiration ... Marti Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a gorgeous write |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I think I am beginning to figure it out that I don't spend enough time actually sitting and writing my poems that's for sure. Usually I am in such a hurry I think something up, do it, find a picture and poof - up it goes. Lately I do them in Word, take my time and maybe do three at once, and work on those three until I crack a smile, then poof them up! Thank you all for showing me the error of my ways for with time spent in your imagination you can turn a leaf into a sequin and I now remember what my Mom used to say, Quantity doesn't always mean Quality, and she was right. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Slowing reaching down She sadly winks rain filled eyes, throwing a final kiss to the wind, In a fond September farewell. Sharon, you are so special!!! Everything you write turns to gold, or magic as the case may be. I really loved this, and you~ |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Your eyes and heart bring a beautiful perception to all.You grow more and more everyday and the essence is amazing. Crystal |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOW! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I too mourn the Fall.... beautifully penned Sharon Keeping it. Maree |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mysteria Well done sweety, well done. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well dear friends, September is gone, as are all the memories of that month we stored like squirrels filling their cheeks, in our minds. What will October bring - the beauty of falling leaves, October moons, and now, the cuddles of chilly lovers begin. I absolutely adore this time of year, for it awakens the love that stays dorment in our hearts to see the changes of yet another year to come. I am so glad you all enjoyed this, as much as I did doing it as it is a new one for my site that will be expanding soon. I appreciate your time and feedback always. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-03-2003 12:52 PM).] |
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