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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Vacancy Reflections in the bottle full - bone china and a touch of brass - remnants of a former self before the black and white of now this life I barely breathe today In disarray I've made this bed of corners tucked within the mind I've left behind the 'me' of me in search of something lacking still This void within, filled from without embracing all that's in surround yet mirrored in the bottle now... this vacancy of me ~Vicky L. Raynes When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-30-2003 01:28 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"remnants of a former self before the black and white of now this life I barely breathe today In disarray I've made this bed of corners tucked within the mind" Amazing.. I love this. |
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n2dmystic Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 253beyond the doors of perception |
"I've left behind the 'me' of me in search of something lacking still This void within, filled from without embracing all that's in surround yet mirrored in the bottle now... this vacancy of me" yes, at times we do tend to give our power to, and find our value in, extrinsic forces, whatever they may be. Very well written. I loved the " 'me' of me" Peace, Joe |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good penning,,, |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I've left behind the 'me' of me in search of something lacking still This void within, filled from without embracing all that's in surround yet mirrored in the bottle now... this vacancy of me Vicky, this one really touched me. It hurts.  Heart hugs, my friend,  Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I love every single line Vicky... wonderful penning m'friend  Maree. fate is not just |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can see by this how you can relate to me so well sometimes...  hugs to you |
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Darren Junior Member
since 2003-09-30
Posts 30 |
Hello, i'm new here, and would like to preface this by saying, I in no way feel qualified to be a poetry critic. As we all no poetry is subjective and impossible to critique, that said I know what I like, and I really liked this alot. Great Job.. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Beautifully penned, Vicky! I sure could relate to this write. Guess we've all had some vacant days. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Reflections in the bottle full - bone china and a touch of brass - remnants of a former self before the black and white of now this life I barely breathe today In disarray Bravo!!! ..oh yeah... BRAVO!!!!!! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Very much enjoyed, speaking of change and how very necessary it is, to submit to self growth through self exploration. Great read, thanks a million. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Vicky...Great write. Makes one reflect on the wholeness of life and what is missing at times...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How well I know this unoccupied feeling... Well done, Miss Vicky... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"I've left behind the 'me' of me in search of something lacking still" Once again, you've taken the words right out of my own thoughts. Life isn't really all that bad... just don't take it too seriously |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky...I don't see vacant, but full...I do understand the feeling though and you wrote it oh so well. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Vicky - emptiness is a vacancy but to be overcome. Liked you write... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Vicky, I have always believed hat the glass is half full in my heart, but I too believe that sometimes I find I'm outside the glass and should be inside and that makes me feel isolated and divided! (sad sigh) We all will feel empty at times and I send angel hugs of comfort to help ease the emptiness in your heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Vicky, you’ve expressed so well a feeling that I think we all feel from time to time. Vicky, I hope it isn’t long before your heart is booked solid with joy and contentment. And that the “No Vacancy” sign lights up again, real soon! Great Poem! And Best Wishes! Richy |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahh but Vicky . . . I see you shining . . . and it is a beautiful sight my sis . . . you are far from vacant although I do know the feeling Soon, your chest will fill with breath of all breaths and you will shall be consumed by every nerve in your body as you dance beneath the moon I adore this and you and your writing Much Love Sue xxoo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
each line spoke to me Vicky... each line~ hugssss M |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
well written; some very clever lines in this one.. enjoyed... hugs, g "Now would you mind if I bared my soul / If I came right out and said you're beautiful..." B. Adams |
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