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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-09-29 04:08 PM

Come late September
And the winds turn face
Chasing the geese south
On premonitions that days
Become shorter
And nights
The haven for cold star twinkle
Unblemished by distorting rise
Of heat.

I relish this time
In a lament of summers gone
That wails on the gales to come
And those prematurely born
from some rogue mass
Of high pressure passing.

“Weep for us”
Say the trees
As grass burns brown in frost
And the finery of worn green
Becomes the Persian weave
For our feet.

“I would cry for you”
I reply,

for all the darkened skies
and all the winter storms
that lie now unborn
shall be the bleak
that draws out my sigh

shall break the weakened
heart of limb with ice

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves

then I will weep
for green

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-09-29 04:16 PM

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

It is not time to cry for you…

not yet, but soon...

I'll pop this up
when the time is right....

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-09-29 04:22 PM

"It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves

then I will weep
for green"

You/This leaves me speechless...
Amazing...beautiful..haunting.
~Soft smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-09-29 04:43 PM

“Weep for us”
Say the trees
As grass burns brown in frost
And the finery of worn green
Becomes the Persian weave
For our feet.

===============================
shall break the weakened
heart of limb with ice

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves
=======================================

oh my....
OH MY!!!!!!
me mothy tree huggin heart is giddy!!!!

You do know what youve done here dont you?
you have just taken all that Frost encompassed with "Nothing Gold Can Stay"..and put a stunning spin of classic Capt poetry on it....
and now.....I have another poem to print out to go in my photo album of trees.

Some day...we WILL say...
we knew him when...................
dont doubt the moth

"If you feel heartbreak, distant thunder, lightning, earthquakes ...
If you wonder why the earth moves ... this is me missing you."

JH

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2003-09-29 04:48 PM

Ron...What a treasure of words this is!

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

5 posted 2003-09-29 05:08 PM

Oh Ron...no not yet time to cry for the green, not time to mourn her, for she is still with us. There will be that time when brown, then white brings forth grieving for the green. Do not look to that day, but let the green settle in your mind now. Live in this moment.

A very beautiful write...one I will recall when the chill reaches me.

Patricia

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2003-09-29 05:13 PM

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside

Oh my! I guess I should tell you while I am here,

that I read absolutely every darn thing that you write, because I am so much better for it when I do. This was no exception, so ...please take this little thank you for your poems always being here when I need a Cphat Phix LOL, so here ya go - put it on your wall okay? You truly are the BEST!

Carpe' Diem
The Canuck, Sharon

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2003-09-29 05:20 PM

wonderful wonderful write, I wish I could say I had time to read all you write, but am 'sneaking' right now just to be here, our network has gotten to be the pits....
jb goes back to breaking rocks...sighs...and
remembers the green....

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2003-09-29 10:23 PM

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags
===========================
came back to read this beauty again...
fall has been quite the muse for you....
what you did with imagery and personify in this is pure poetry.

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

9 posted 2003-09-29 10:35 PM

We will all weep for green till about April, I'm afraid......some great images here,
Thanks.......Larry

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

10 posted 2003-09-29 10:45 PM

Makes me both glad and sad that I live in Southern California. I miss a lot of things, but I also miss out on a lot of things.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2003-09-30 01:23 PM

This is stunningly beautiful, Cap'n...

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

12 posted 2003-09-30 01:24 PM

A poet, you are..and wonderfully so.

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

13 posted 2003-09-30 01:52 PM

“Weep for us”
Say the trees
As grass burns brown in frost
And the finery of worn green
Becomes the Persian weave
For our feet.

“I would cry for you”
I reply,

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves

then I will weep
for green

Fantastic!

[This message has been edited by KoKo (09-30-2003 02:02 PM).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

14 posted 2003-09-30 02:18 PM

CPat~

A fine, fine piece of writing~

'where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags'

How resplendant are these thoughts~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

15 posted 2003-09-30 03:50 PM

damnit ron you're amazing

arthur
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

16 posted 2003-09-30 04:08 PM

this is very good
sir -you are a poet
arthur

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

17 posted 2003-09-30 04:53 PM

"'Weep for us'
Say the trees
As grass burns brown in frost"

seems that the colder things are
the deeper they burn.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

18 posted 2003-09-30 04:57 PM

"It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves

then I will weep
for green"

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

19 posted 2003-10-20 11:36 AM

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

"I've still got sand in my shoes
and I can't shake the thought of you ...
I wanna see you again."

Dido

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

20 posted 2003-10-20 11:49 AM

Amazing, sad, beautiful, and tender all rolled into one.You awe me with your words and touch my heart with your spirit.It's the essence of seeing through your eyes when I read you.

Crystal

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

21 posted 2003-10-20 11:49 AM

Ron...A captivating write. It draws the reader right into the heart of it. Enjoyed very much. Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

22 posted 2003-10-20 05:22 PM

Excellent write Ron, imagery and descriptiveness well done....and you call me
Mr. Smooth? Nice try...NOT!!!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

23 posted 2003-10-20 09:43 PM

CPat~

WONDERFUL !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

24 posted 2003-10-20 09:43 PM

I understand this....very well done sir...hugsss
Lauren~

Will the wind ever remember
the names it has blown in the past
with its crutch, its old age, and its
wisdom it whispers no this won't be the last

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

25 posted 2003-10-21 05:58 PM

I truly must echo the comments of those before me... This was... "apparitional" and "melaniscent". That's the best I can come up with at the moment. Very nice, Ron.

-MVS

P.S.,

...and a very striking title, too!

You CAN make a difference: http://educate-yourself.org/

[This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (10-21-2003 05:59 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

26 posted 2003-10-31 09:01 AM

Time is right...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

27 posted 2003-10-31 09:14 AM

absolute beauty here...both the poetry and your heart....put them together and you've got one fine day....smiles and hugs...

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

28 posted 2003-11-01 07:26 PM

I relish this time
In a lament of summers gone
That wails on the gales to come
And those prematurely born
from some rogue mass
Of high pressure passing.

You are just too cool and a such a talented poet!!!
Love those lines, Cpat!

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

29 posted 2003-11-01 11:32 PM

"“I would cry for you”
I reply,

for all the darkened skies
and all the winter storms
that lie now unborn
shall be the bleak
that draws out my sigh

shall break the weakened
heart of limb with ice

but not yet…
for still the sun graces me
with days of passing warm
and you stand poised
to add your fine cloth of colors
to the hillside
where you,
in splendid vanity lean out
o’er the edge of lake
to see the reflected beauty
of such dress
then grace the waters skin
in the float of wind stripped rags

It is not time to cry for you…

I will save those tears for now

And wait

Until naked you shiver
          bare limbs awry
without the robes your form so craves

then I will weep
             for green"

Where the hell have I been??

Amazing...unbelievably amazing.
I don't believe I realized how much I've missed reading you.

pandonov
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 478
b/w conscience and insolence

30 posted 2003-11-02 12:02 PM

original

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

31 posted 2003-11-02 02:11 AM

too many great lines to pick out...just know I liked this ALOT

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

32 posted 2003-11-02 10:58 AM

there she stands
nearly naked, bare
stripped of her dignity
fallen about her feet
dreams, hope and fate
acclimation, acclimation
singing songs a shrill caw
heard in the mist
a lone tear escapes
from sky to branch to twig
stopping to taste
the bitterness of existence
only for a second
before forming, frozen
upon her arms, legs
ultimately her face
I shall not cry
I know this path
the circle,
I witness each passing season
as a notch on my
life
as it is upon her own

Ron this is beautiful
thank you for inspiring me
xxoo

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

33 posted 2003-11-02 11:28 AM

*sighing*

shiver me timbers,
you've done it again, Ron

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

34 posted 2003-11-02 03:53 PM

(big hugggsssssss) There's always the right to cry, but there has to be a good timing to it and in this particular time of year it can be overwhelming! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

35 posted 2004-04-20 04:04 PM

I know the werk monster has been keeping you busy...just wanted ya to know you are missed groovy guy.

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