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freehode
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0 posted 2003-09-29 11:21 AM


Callous serf in empress clothing
Keep watch, her fangs are showing
Rubies and sapphire all glisten and glitter
Alas, she’s painted gold

A comedy of errors subvert her grace
No sign present on the etched face
Claws of paper yet strength of a mace
A supine countenance hides a fervent pace

Beware of that which she shines
As though it appears bright and true
Alas, she’s painted gold.

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-09-29 12:38 PM


deception is the smiling face you see on me

good write here

QjQ
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2 posted 2003-09-30 09:23 PM


good penning,,,

                                                               

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3 posted 2003-11-22 07:24 PM


Hmmm... just a tad obscure, but solid enough to excuse that. I'd consider clarifying the lady's role in life, but that's about it.

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Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-11-22 07:28 PM


Oh, yes! All that glitters isn't gold!

Lover beware!

Hi, Freehode! Welcome to Passions!

~ Warm welcoming hugs!

Earth Angel

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