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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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On Monday there will be death- roadkill tarnishing these streets, I cannot wait to see what the future brings- lonely Tuesdays, you stare out the window and wish you were somewhere else fragile but you could withstand stone rain Glass lungs closing up shatter with the need to inhale exhale it kills you but you just don’t care, so long as you live to be 100, (or live until Saturday) die saving someone else (when you barely know your own voice) but then again hurt yourself slowly dieing but surely still alive and that’s more life that could be stopped amidst a heartbeat who is standing in the doorway- strangers standing everywhere… not afraid, only jump at touch needs sound but not from human lips But you just don’t care. at this rate we’ll be dead by Friday And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" -Tool [This message has been edited by Wind (09-21-2003 08:44 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz: it still amazes me, and always will how you see right into everything, yank it out and put it down like this fragile but you could withstand stone rain EXACTLY Beautiful writing xxoo |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) I truly believe that everyone who helps one another, every philanthropist, has their own anguish to work with, and that is natural, and that proves we are imperfect but have to accept the sympathy and advice as that helps us grow and live! (sigh) With this circle intact, we'll all die at some rate, but not this Friday, but hundreds of Fridays away from now, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
My little friend, Liz...I am so glad that I know your poetry writing comes from your brain and not your heart. Therefore, this is not the way you really feel inside. Right??? You know, little lady, you are a brilliant writer.....I just don't understand dark. Love and hugs to you, my friend  Ethel |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"fragile but you could withstand stone rain" YES... Gawd...you write this so well...amazing. When the power of love overcomes the |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Like the wind, you amaze! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thabks everyone Noah and Ehtel- of course I am fine. I just..think..a little much. but thats my head. The heart is an organ that pumps blood throughout the body. lol And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enoyed the penning,,, |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
may I ask what inspired this? you always get me thinking. cos its always something weird, and i love reading the origins of yer writes. gah, some striking lines here.. fragile but you could withstand stone rain Glass lungs closing up shatter with the need to inhale exhale it kills you but you just don’t care, you are the queen of mind aching dark. why does your muse never leave you? i just had to force a write out of frustration. send me some. or i'll kill you by friday. That was an empty threat, i love you.  Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
lol gem. songs...as usual. a whole bunch of them  1. U2- sunday bloody sunday (I l#ve U2...thats funny when you say it out loud. you know? I lov you too  )2. KoRn- make me bad (I swear it's a good song) 3.White stripes- dead leaves and the dirty ground...dunno why 4. radiohead- my iron lung/ high and dry  someone better take this cd away from me before I go beserkmy 'muse' never leaves me because music never leaves me. and you shut up cause you are a great writer. i lava you And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" -Tool [This message has been edited by Wind (09-21-2003 09:02 PM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I'm saving this, it's so good..it hurts. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
glad you liked it meg And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
slowly dieing but surely still alive and that’s more life that could be stopped amidst a heartbeat You are such a good poet, and always you leave me with a thousand ways to interpret your writing. Good job~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A fantastic write... Enjoyed! Maree fate is not just |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
THIS IS A FORMAL WARNING! WRITE SOME MORE POEMS OF THE FLY GETS IT! (THATS ME) SO, ER WRITE SOMETHING PLEEEEEEEESE?! I MEAN, WRITE SOMETHING NOWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SIGNED I.M Notscary |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is great.Your writing always makes me delve deep into my soul and see your interpretation of things.Not many do that. Crystal |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
OOps sorry i'd missed this one..ah yes the Bends i think i wore that cd out..and then Ok computer wore me out..for a minute i lost myself I lost myself |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sweet Liz...I knew you were okay. I just wanted you to know that I care if you're okay or not.  But, you already know that, too, don't you? And, the music? Gary loves that kind of music. I like Soft Rock, like Enya and Celine Dion and Michael Bolton. But, I love Kiss, too....and the Beatles, and Rod Stewart, and Sheryl Crowe....and on and on... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Liz, I still cannot fathom how someone so young can write with such depth of emotion. I'd like to think that I have a way with words now, but at your age I was feeling what you are feeling, but, could never dare to match your expression. You have a gift, You kick poetic butt....I'm saving this~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
painfully interesting |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
wow... this is...yea... wow. I'm keeping this, k? - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
oops NOW Im keeping this. - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
eek you bumpers. you bumped it. and I did write something gem...two days ago. you just haven't read it yet  What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
no wait a second raph? you lost yourslef a loooooooong time ago. phhlt. I don't wanna post it gem. I wear myself out. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Liz? where have you been? I was just asking someone about you and there you are... bump (b/c I know you love it)  "if you won't let me fall for you |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
this is why you are my favorite :Þ your poems hold my heart i think that it's brainless to assume that making changes to your window's view will gain a new perspective. |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
no words of mine would do justice to yours....so i must just say amen joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
woww!!! |
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