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dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

0 posted 2003-09-26 01:54 AM

The shells
glitter in the moonlight.
Small and round,
they nestle in the cool sand
near the water's edge.

The sea
softly tastes the shore.
Rippling waves
cast their moonlit patterns
to forms on sea and sand.

The beach
stretches endlessly.
Reflecting
a warm summer night, a dream
of perfect solitude.

Perfect.

But for the bodies of dead men
and a scattering of shells.

Larry W. Allen

[This message has been edited by dingusjr (09-26-2003 02:18 AM).]

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

1 posted 2003-09-26 01:58 AM

Forgive me sometimes I lose my head.I'd like to welcome you to Passions.May you enjoy it here as much as I do.This poem ached , but it was touched with your heart.Well penned.
Crystal

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2003-09-26 02:03 AM

This is a poem that is engraved on my memory. Thank you for posting it.

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vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2003-09-26 02:12 AM

Wow...Larry...this is such a beautiful write,
and the ending is so very powerful...like an
unforgiving slap in the face.

Very well penned, poet sir.

~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-09-26 09:07 AM

You smacked me well
with this twist.

Yep. A Must Read.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-09-26 09:10 AM

Love this! Fantastic ending....well done!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I love your glances meeting mine
across forever or the room ~

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

6 posted 2003-09-26 09:12 AM

Wow, I like that slap of reality at the end. I can't help but think about that when visiting "the shore". Shells. ~K~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2003-09-26 05:00 PM

This is superb! Welcome to Passions... I'm looking forward to reading more of your work! *S*

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

8 posted 2003-09-26 05:15 PM

I really enjoyed this piece Larry. Well done and welcome! Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2003-09-26 05:21 PM

Larry...what an ending! May I take this opportunity to welcome you to Passions in Poetry. I look forward to seeing more of your poetry.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-09-26 05:28 PM

I was swept away by the beauty of the images and the lilting cadence of your writing...

and then WHACK! I was slammed in the solar plexus! The contrast between the body of the poem and the ending, was very effective in sending your message out loud and clear.

Peace & Light,
and warm welcoming hugs,
Earth Angel

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

11 posted 2003-09-26 05:33 PM

Bless all of you for the kind words.........I think I am going to like my new home!
(grins like a jackass eating briers)...now there is an image for you!
Larry

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

12 posted 2003-09-26 08:14 PM

You have a gift for imagery (that's easy to see, heh-heh) and I truly like the way you turn an ending, rotate the entire poem on its axis.

~~J

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

13 posted 2003-09-26 08:16 PM

THINK?????

KNOW!!!!!!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

14 posted 2003-09-26 11:12 PM

(tears fall dwn my cheeks) Oh Larry, the ending truly was a slap in the face, sweet friend, it made me think of the terrible wars on the beaches in World War II, or lost captains and sailors at sea, and it saddens me how the ocean also has many victims captive! (wipes tears) You speak of this so well, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Larry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

dingusjr
Member

since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

15 posted 2003-09-26 11:14 PM

Exactly. I had in mind Omaha Beach.....but a title like that would give it away.
Thank you for the kind words.
Larry

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

16 posted 2003-09-26 11:18 PM

Wow. Definitly a damn good addition to pip, you are. I'm sticking this in my library. Absolutely...just...damn.

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