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In my little tiny office
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In my little tiny office |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
She brought him to my office after day of tiring work. The image of their playing eyes brought back a memory that long had ceased to lurk. His babbling eyes and bright words contrasted hers a bit. Hers, just as beautiful, when in her humbled silence they gleamed a fire lit. From every expression and word he spoke she comsumed his vibrant color via her paintbrush eyes. Through her eyes she spread the aura in the room I saw colors rise. ‘Tis a different five o’clock after a day of tiring work. As I lift my jacket from the hook for color, I have to stop and look. Their presence had been so great, e n l a r g i n g a little tiny room. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (11-21-2003 07:26 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sometimes you just have to capture the moment.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow sometimes we all have to pause in search of the colors |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ratleader, Thanks for stopping by again. Yeah, I just had to give it a whirl at penning the moment. This was very difficult for me. Do you have any tips on how to do this type of thing? I wonder how one puts more action in something like this, so as to help hold the reader's attention. (When I wrote it yesterday, I was satisfied, but as I read it today, I find it doesn't hold my attention) Any ideas would be great... Sadelite |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, It's good to hear from you again. Thanks for your positive comments... Sadie |
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