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Open Poetry #29

Cleansing Rain (Tanka)

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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0 posted 2003-11-20 01:07 AM

Cleansing Rain

Winds wisp sullen skies
Wringing droplets dripping rain
Cleansing souls undone
Renewing, fresh’ning refrains
Life anew begins again.

[This message has been edited by steavenr (11-20-2003 09:44 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2003-11-20 03:22 AM

wonderful! nice write

ice
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since 2003-05-17

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Pennsylvania

2 posted 2003-11-20 07:28 AM

stevener
You did try it...:-)
and did very well.....this form gives you just a wee bit more room to explain your thoughts..sometime we need that space.
Good Job......:-)

_______ice
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A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

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Forever In Your Heart

3 posted 2003-11-20 09:12 PM

Tears have a way of doing that...At the moment I am in cleansing rain...

Loved the way you did this poem!

~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2003-11-20 09:53 PM

this is just the peace I was looking for tonight...soft
Lauren~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

5 posted 2003-11-20 09:59 PM

I feel cleansed, refreshed and renewed from reading this beautifully descriptive poem.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2003-11-20 11:09 PM

Thank you all for your kind comments. This was a new style for me. Thanks, Ice, for the tutelage.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-11-21 06:34 AM

Between raindrop's fall
There remains some drier ground
But for a moment
Then the waters seem to swell
Engulfing one's thoughts as well

~&~

I so enjoy when a poet makes one think.

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