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A light breeze. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Today, the backdrop of the world is warmer than the palm of our hands combined. Lest we let that keep us from shivering, being held makes me feel like there's a damn good reason to be cold. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
being held makes me feel like there's a damn good reason to be cold. ~*~ I know some people who are going to hold on to this one very tight! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Today, the backdrop of the world is warmer than the palm of our hands combined. these lines set well the form, by creating an image that draws the reader in, the following lines, then the ending, all deliver the punch, the part that takes your breath for a second, in understanding and in empathy... you dear do truly impress me... you write well beyond your years in understanding and have the talent to deliver the words in such a way they become a part of the reader... I'll be proud to say one day... "I read her before..I read her when.." |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
very nice...=) Joe |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
I like this Alot |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well written |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes this is good in few words, manaaging to get the idea across and draw in the read |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kaoru Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
very nice! ~K~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your words are a seer and guide, and need to be published for all to rein in the wealth of your mind. Astounding write...took me right in and held me very closely. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
there is a reason...loved this! adding for sure... "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Meghan~ You are quite a remarkable writer young lady~ Wonderful read` *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
really nice...James |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
I'm going to have to disagree with those above. You miss me with this one. I don't see it. -glider- |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
That COULD be a problem, Glider. But there's no way I could possibly explain. My apologies. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Another stunning piece. I agree, a remarkable talent you have. I am looking forward to watching it grow with you. (The mind boggles as to how it will grow  )Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I love the ending to this lovely poem! I'm with you! ~ Being held is one hellova good reason for getting cold!   EA |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ahhh yea! I love it... Makes me cold... but it makes me love it.. in some twisted warm way. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
i know exactly what you mean....i like this one alot joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
haha, tremendous joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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